Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided bar graphs illustrate the number of young adults who speak French regional language with their kids and who heard when they are kids. The number of adults measured in thousands, and total five kinds of French regional language spoken, including Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole, and Corsican.
Overall, Occitan was moderately spoken occasionally by parents, while Creole and Corsican were least spoken regional languages habitually and occasionally to individuals via their parents when they were child. The adults who became newly parents were speak Alsatian majorly with their children.
The number of young adults whose parents spoke Occitan to them in their childhood occasionally were above 1m and habitualy were only around 600 thousands. Although Alsatian spoken on daily basis by 600 thousands parents, it reduced to 250 thousands occasionally. However, the other languages remained at their lower speakers around 100 thousands adults.
The number of young adults whose spoke Occitan with their children were above 250 thousandsand habitualy were only around 600 thousands. Although Alsatian spoken on daily basis by 600 thousands parents, it reduced to 250 thousands occasionally. However, the other languages remained at their lower speakers around 100 thousands adults.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student attempts to address the main trends in the charts, identifying key languages such as Occitan and Alsatian. However, there are significant issues with data accuracy and interpretation. For example, the text claims that 'Alsatian spoken on daily basis by 600 thousands parents, it reduced to 250 thousands occasionally,' whereas the chart shows 240 thousand for occasional spoken Alsatian and 400 thousand who speak to their own children. Furthermore, the final paragraph contains repetitive and confused data references. The overview is partially present, but overall development lacks precision, leading to a Band 5.5 classification.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is structured into paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, logical progression is hindered by repetitive sentences and poor linking between ideas, particularly evident in the final paragraph where text is seemingly duplicated or confused. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes inaccurately (e.g., 'Although... however...'), making the transitions awkward. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion breaks down due to faulty referencing and repetition. This meets the criteria for Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for basic description, incorporating terms like 'habitually', 'occasionally', and 'regional language'. However, there are noticeable inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'speak French regional language with their kids', 'became newly parents', and 'lower speakers'. Spelling and morphological errors ('habitualy', 'thousandsand') also occur. The range is limited and repetitive, reflecting Band 5.0 performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but attempts at complex structures frequently result in grammatical errors. Examples include missing verbs and awkward relative clauses, such as 'who speak French regional language with their kids and who heard when they are kids' and 'whose spoke Occitan with their children'. Errors in subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are frequent (e.g., 'were speak', 'Alsatian spoken on daily basis'). These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, placing the writing firmly in Band 5.0.
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