Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This research paper compares the number of people who in their childhood were raised in a houshold where the parents spoke a regional language.
The research paper shows the stats of five regional languages;
The most apparent find of these charts is that we notice the use of Alsatian and Occitan was very common habitually but Occitan was spoken much more occasionally while the use of Alsatian was very frequent. We can observe that this research argues that the languages no matter how habitual cannot be passed down solely through customs, Rather ocassional conversations are also helpful.
This research shows that even though the use of Alsatian and Occitan was almost identical but the number of dults also speaking those languages to their children decreased for Occitan by almost 40 percent. But the use of Alsatian defying the trend increased instead of decreasing like all other regional languages. That's all.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe the charts comparing the number of French adults whose parents spoke regional languages with those who speak them to their own children. However, the candidate fails to properly introduce the charts or cover the main trends comprehensively, spending too much space on subjective speculation about customs and occasional conversations ('this research argues that the languages no matter how habitual cannot be passed down solely through customs'). Furthermore, there are misinterpretations of the data, such as claiming that the use of Alsatian 'increased instead of decreasing like all other regional languages', which is factually incorrect according to the provided visual data. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a band score of 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text suffers from poor structural organisation and unconventional paragraphing. The response begins with fragmented single-sentence paragraphs and ends abruptly with an informal conversational sign-off ('That\'s all.'), which is entirely inappropriate for an academic report. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as the abrupt transition 'Rather ocassional conversations are also helpful.' Referencing between sentences lacks clarity, and the overall progression of information is disjointed. While the text is just about coherent enough to follow the writer's line of thought, the mechanical and faulty cohesion restricts it to a band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, relying on terms like 'research paper', 'number of people', and 'languages'. There are several noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'houshold', 'stats' (informal), 'ocassional', and 'dults' (adults). While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary ('apparent find', 'habitually'), inaccuracies in collocation and word formation limit precision and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, corresponding to a band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The candidate demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but attempts at complex structures are frequently marred by poor punctuation and grammatical errors, such as run-on sentences and missing commas ('This research shows that even though the use of Alsatian and Occitan was almost identical but the number of dults also speaking those languages...'). Punctuation errors are prominent, including a rogue semicolon before a new sentence clause. Although the meaning can generally be extracted, frequent grammatical slips and awkward phrasing place this response firmly in the band 5.0 range.
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