Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The Charts Illustrates The number of French adults whose parents spoke The French regional language To them when they were Childrean and the number who speak a French regional language to Their own Children.
Overall, There are Significantly ranges of languages Available Like Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole, Corsican. In the barriers of language There are also Two Types of Departments Available Including Percentage of Total Average Of Spoken French Language.
However, There Is Major differences between Spoken habitually and Spoken occasionally language. Childrean speak more Alsatian language and Occitan language. Intially major spoken language in Adults while they were Child are among highest in comparison of Creole language .
In Contrast Number of adults in Thousands who speak a ragional language to their own childrean are Confident with small speaking language like Breton In total values of 200. Somehow, There is big impact on regional adults to speaking on language difficulties and less communication. Moreover, Both of are diffrent tones of Habitet in Spoken such languages.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response attempts to address the task by mentioning the charts and listing languages such as Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole, and Corsican. However, the data interpretation is extremely inaccurate and confused. Phrases like 'Significantly ranges of languages Available' and 'Percentage of Total Average Of Spoken French Language' show a failure to accurately report the figures presented in the charts, such as the thousands of adults speaking habitually or occasionally, or passing the language to their children. Key trends, such as Occitan and Alsatian having the highest figures, are poorly articulated, and much of the commentary is vague or irrelevant (e.g., 'language difficulties and less communication'). The response falls well short of a clear, coherent overview of the data, warranting a low band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The essay is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall organisation and progression of ideas are severely impaired. Transitions between sentences and paragraphs feel disjointed and confusing (e.g., 'In Contrast Number of adults... are Confident with small speaking language'). Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow a logical argument. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks logical sequencing and clear thematic development.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and often unnatural or inaccurate in context (e.g., 'Significantly ranges', 'barriers of language', 'habitet'). There are numerous word-choice errors that strain the reader's comprehension, such as 'Confident with small speaking language' and 'big impact on regional adults to speaking on language difficulties'. The range of vocabulary is limited and lacks the precision required to discuss statistical charts effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying mostly on simple and awkwardly structured sentences. There are frequent, intrusive errors in grammar, punctuation, and capitalization throughout the text (e.g., random capitalization in 'The Charts Illustrates The number...', 'Childrean', 'Intially', 'diffrent tones'). Complex structures are rarely attempted, and when they are, they are marred by structural breakdowns and faulty agreements, which impede communication.
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