Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar charts compare teh number of french adults whose parents spoke a french regional language to them when they were childrenand the number who speak a french regional language to their own children.

Overall, Adults show the stronger preference for Occitan in spoken habitually and spoken occasionally. Where adults has no more interest in corsican, creole and breton in both catagories. The last one language is alsatian has more demands in spoken habitually as compare to spoken occasionally.

In the term of alsatia adults has 600k whoes pasrents spoke a regional language to them in chilhood while higher than 200k adults. Moreover, occitan has same 600 in first catagory while, 1m adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them in chilhood.Therefore, other languages cosican, creole has lower than 100k prefer it between habitually and occasionally spoken in these two categories.

By contrast, another graph show the alsatian language has 400 thousands people speak a regional lanuage to their own childern. Apart from that Occitan speak approximately 230 thouasnds humans speak. Furthermore, last three languages breton, creole and corsican has to move downward less than 100k adults whose speak these three languges.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to address all parts of the task by comparing the data across the categories of habitual, occasional, and intergenerational language use. However, the response suffers from significant weaknesses in data accuracy and interpretation. Several figures are misquoted or confused, such as stating 'occitan has same 600 in first catagory while, 1m adults' and incorrectly reading the chart axes. The overview attempts to capture general trends but is phrased confusingly ('Adults show the stronger preference for Occitan'). Furthermore, the comparison between the first chart and the second chart lacks clarity. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed with under-developed and inaccurate data selection, fitting the Band 5 profile.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response exhibits some basic organisation by dividing the information into an introduction, an overview paragraph, and body paragraphs discussing the charts. However, there is no clear overall progression, and the logical links between sentences are frequently strained or broken. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'The last one language is alsatian' and 'Therefore, other languages cosican, creole has lower than 100k'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is disjointed and difficult to follow, leading to a mechanical and sometimes confusing flow. This aligns with Band 5.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on simple terms like 'language', 'adults', 'parents', and 'category'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'teh', 'french', 'catagories', 'alsatia', 'pasrents', 'chilhood', 'cosican', 'lanuage', 'childern', and 'thouasnds'. Attempts to use less common or academic vocabulary result in inaccurate word choices and awkward collocations (e.g., 'humans speak'). While the meaning can sometimes be guessed, the lexical limitations and errors frequently impede smooth reading, placing this submission firmly at Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The student uses a very limited range of sentence structures, mostly relying on simple sentences or awkward attempts at complex clauses that result in severe grammatical errors. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, and prepositions, such as 'Adults show the stronger preference', 'Where adults has no more interest', 'another graph show', and 'breton, creole and corsican has to move downward'. Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic (e.g., lowercase 'french'). These frequent grammatical errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and distort meaning at times, corresponding to Band 4.

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