Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given image is a bar graph which illusrtates vital information regarding the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children. If we look closely its clearly seen that the graph is divided in five categories such as Creole and Breton. The x-axis shows the language while on the other hand y-xis explain the value. The highest value is Occitan country language while in contrast the least value is Corsican. In graph, the value of Occitan is is low in first graph while the other is high. The value of Creoleis country language same the both graph while the value of Breton is touch to four hundred contrast the value is below the four hundred. In third graph shows the Alsatian language is high all the countries while the value of Occitan is above to two hundred. The value of Breton country is touch to hundred while the value of Creole is less than the country language of Breton all the country shows the languages.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the charts, but it fails to provide a clear overview or accurately represent the data. The student misinterprets the structure of the charts, referring to them as 'first graph', 'other', and 'third graph', whereas the prompt shows a breakdown of regional languages by status (spoken habitually, occasionally, and to own children). Important trends and comparisons, such as the dominance of Occitan and Alsatian compared to Creole and Corsican, are described in a confusing and inaccurate manner (e.g., 'The highest value is Occitan country language while in contrast the least value is Corsican'). Furthermore, many figures are misreported or vague, such as 'is touch to four hundred'. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 as the information is poorly selected and largely inaccurate.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The essay is written as a single, dense block of text without proper paragraphing. Cohesion is faulty and mechanical, relying on repetitive or confusing transitional phrases such as 'If we look closely its clearly seen', 'on the other hand', and 'while in contrast'. There is no clear logical progression of ideas; instead, the sentences jump erratically between different languages and chart sections without guiding the reader effectively. Pronoun referencing and linking devices are inaccurate and obscure the relationship between ideas. This level of organisation aligns with Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The lexical range is very basic and repetitive, with frequent misuse of vocabulary (e.g., 'illusrtates', 'country language', 'value' used repeatedly instead of figures or numbers). The student struggles with basic word choice and collocation, incorrectly describing categories as 'countries' ('Occitan country language', 'Breton country'). Spelling errors ('illusrtates', 'y-xis') and inaccurate terminology limit the response. However, basic terms related to the visual data are attempted. This meets the criteria for Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple and attempted complex sentences that contain frequent errors. There are numerous basic grammatical inaccuracies, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the value of Creoleis... same the both graph'), missing prepositions, and faulty relative or comparative structures ('is touch to four hundred contrast the value is below the four hundred'). Punctuation is also weak. These errors frequently strain meaning and cause difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
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