Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar graphs below depict the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
The overview information provided by the bar graph is occitian and alsatian regional language were the most popular languages conversed in by their parents and least popular turns out to be corsican , where as for the most of conversation with their own children the language turns out to be alsatian language with least spoken corsican
The bar graph depicts that alsatin and occitan were the most spoken laguages in terms of conversation between adults parents , where as creole and corsican is amount the least spoken langues by their parents . Where as mode of communication with their own children has declined in numbers yet alsatian is the most popular followed by occitan and least turns out to be corsican .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by mentioning some of the main trends shown in the charts, such as identifying Occitan and Alsatian as the most popular languages and Corsican as the least popular. However, the response is extremely brief and lacks a fully developed overview. Furthermore, specific data figures are omitted entirely (e.g., no numbers are given for the thousands of speakers), which prevents a thorough description of the information. The text relies heavily on vague generalisations without detailing the breakdown between habitual and occasional speakers as presented in the visual data. As a result, the response falls into Band 5, as it addresses the task only partially with limited and under-developed ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The essay is divided into three short paragraphs, but the overall organisation and progression are weak. The second and third paragraphs repeat very similar information about the most and least popular languages without adding clear new progression or effectively synthesizing the data. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate, such as using 'where as' repeatedly and incorrectly to link clauses. Referencing is also somewhat confusing with phrases like 'most of conversation with their own children the language turns out to be'. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with a lack of clear separation of distinct data sets. This performance aligns with Band 4 descriptors for cohesion and logical arrangement.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms like 'popular', 'languages', 'parents', and 'children' throughout the short text. There are numerous spelling errors, including 'occitian', 'alsatin', 'laguages', 'langues', and 'corsican' in lowercase. Collocations and word choices are unnatural, such as 'languages conversed in by their parents' and 'conversation with their own children the language turns out to be alsatian language'. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for a standard academic task response, making it typical of a Band 4 performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are poorly constructed fragments or run-on sentences with severe punctuation and capitalisation flaws. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('occitian and alsatian regional language were', 'creole and corsican is amount'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing ('least turns out to be corsican'). Complex structures are rarely attempted accurately, and the high frequency of errors causes significant difficulty for the reader. These features reflect the Band 4 descriptors.
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