Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart illustrate the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
On one hand we wrote a report on number of adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood. Alsatian and Occitan spoke habitually 600 thousands by parents to their children, while Breton is at 300 thousands and Creole and corsican are below 100 thousands. Occitan spoke occasionally is more than 1 million and Breton is 400 thousands, Creole and corsican are at 100 thousands.
On the other hand we wrote a report on number of adults whose parents speak a regional language to their own children. Alsatian spoke 400 thousands by adults to their children. Occitan spoke 250 thousand times while Breton, Creole and corsican sopke less than 100 times.
In conclusion, Occitan spoke widely in France so is the Alsatian.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the main parts of the visual data by referencing the categories of adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them, as well as those speaking to their own children. However, the student misinterprets parts of the data, such as writing 'Alsatian and Occitan spoke habitually 600 thousands', which awkward phrasing makes it confusing to understand who or what is performing the action. Furthermore, some data points are misreported or truncated (e.g., 'Occitan spoke occasionally is more than 1 million'). While an overview is attempted in the conclusion, the overall development is limited and confused by poor phrasing, placing the performance at a Band 5.0 level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay attempts a logical structure by breaking down the charts into separate body paragraphs using transition phrases like 'On one hand' and 'On the other hand'. However, the referencing is frequently unclear, and the mechanical repetition of phrases like 'we wrote a report on number of adults' disrupts the flow. Paragraphing is present, but the overall progression lacks smooth cohesion, and sentences often read as isolated, disjointed statements rather than a cohesive report. This warrants a Band 5.0 score for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The student relies heavily on direct lifting of terms from the prompt ('French regional language', 'adults', 'parents', 'children') and makes unnatural lexical choices, such as 'Alsatian and Occitan spoke habitually 600 thousands' and 'Creole and corsican sopke less than 100 times'. There are also spelling errors such as 'sopke' and capitalization issues ('corsican'). The range of vocabulary is limited and inadequate for a standard academic task, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The grammatical structures attempted are largely simple or faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and voice, such as 'The chart illustrate' (singular/plural mismatch), missing verbs ('Alsatian and Occitan spoke habitually'), and awkward passive/active confusion ('Alsatian spoke 400 thousands by adults'). Punctuation and sentence construction frequently cause difficulty for the reader, though the core meaning can sometimes be guessed. This aligns with Band 5.0.
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