Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given chart describes us about comparison of two languages of French adults.This infortmation tells us about the specific data in the chart of french adults parents who spoke different languages with their children.

At first we talk about number of adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood. Alsation was spoken habitually 600 times and ocassionally 250 times. Occitan was spoken around 650 also occasionaly round about 1000 times. Breton 250 and 400 times. Creole 610 to 1000. Corsican 10 to 100 times.

Secondly chart provides information about number of adults who speak a regional language to their children. Well Alsation was spoke around 400 times. Occitan felt around between 200 to 250. Breton around 100. Creole around 80. Corsican rarely around 50 times.

So there is a complete information of flowchart which tells number of adults who speak regional with their own chidren and parents.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The student attempts to address the task by describing parts of the two charts, mentioning languages such as Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole, and Corsican. However, the response falls short in several areas. Many of the figures and relationships cited are inaccurate when compared against the visual data; for example, the student states that Creole was '610 to 1000' and that Corsican was '10 to 100 times', which misinterprets the scale and data points. Furthermore, the response lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends, which is a core requirement for Academic Task 1. The information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, leading to an overall score of 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response is organised into brief paragraphs attempting an introduction, body details, and a brief concluding sentence ('So there is a complete information of flowchart...'). However, progression is weak, and the logical links between sentences are frequently absent or awkward. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes misused, such as 'At first we talk about' and 'Secondly chart provides information about'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is faulty, making it difficult to follow the relationships between the data points. This corresponds to a band 5.0 score.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on simple terms like 'number of adults', 'languages', and 'spoken'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations throughout the text, such as 'describes us about comparison', 'Alsation was spoke around', and referring to the charts as a 'flowchart'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with inaccuracy or incorrect scaling terms. While the meaning can sometimes be guessed, the restricted range and frequent word-choice errors place this at a band 4.5 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The student demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent grammatical errors. Examples of errors include missing prepositions, tense confusion, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'The given chart describes us about comparison', 'Occitan felt around between 200 to 250'). Punctuation and sentence boundaries are occasionally problematic. Complex structures are attempted rarely and are generally faulty. Because errors are frequent and cause some difficulty for the reader, this performance meets the criteria for band 4.5.

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