Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar charts compares the adults whose parents spoke french regional language in childhood which is further categorized into two categories who spoke habitually and who spoke occasionally to the number who speak a french regional language to their own children.
Overall, the numbers are greater in whose parents spoke a regional language in childhood in both categories. Most number are in Occitan in the ocassional category which is 1m while least Creole and Corsican are least in this category.
Number of adults who speak a regional language to their own children the Alstian category has higher numberwhile least number is shown in corsican category while occitan language has spoken by 250 thousands adults in this category. Breton and creole numbers have slight difference Breton have more spokers than creole this trend is same in adults whose parents spoke habitually a regional language to them in childhood.
In conclusion number of adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood has more number than the other category.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the main features of the charts, identifying key trends and data points such as the higher overall numbers in the childhood language category and noting specific figures like Occitan reaching 1m in the occasional category. However, the overview is somewhat basic and lacks a clear synthesis of the broader patterns across both charts. Furthermore, there are some minor misreadings or imprecise references to the data, such as stating that 'Alsatian category has higher number while least number is shown in corsican category' without fully clarifying which chart or sub-category is being discussed at all times. Despite these shortcomings, all parts of the visual prompt are touched upon, earning a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body details, and a conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. Sentences often lack appropriate transition markers or logical linking, leading to choppy and confusing phrasing, such as 'Number of adults who speak a regional language to their own children the Alstian category has higher numberwhile least number is shown in corsican category'. Referencing is unclear in places, and paragraphing is underdeveloped, with the body text merging distinct comparisons awkwardly. This level of organisation and mechanical cohesion aligns with a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic vocabulary and direct repetition of terms from the prompt, such as 'regional language', 'adults', 'children', and language names like 'Occitan', 'Breton', and 'Creole'. There are noticeable word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'Most number are in Occitan' and 'Breton have more spokers than creole'. Spelling and capitalization errors also occur, such as 'Alstian', 'ocassional', and 'french'. While the vocabulary is adequate to convey a basic meaning, the frequent errors and lack of precision restrict the score to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is weak. There are frequent errors in syntax, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation, such as missing prepositions and run-on structures: 'Number of adults who speak a regional language to their own children the Alstian category has higher numberwhile least number is shown in corsican category while occitan language has spoken by 250 thousands adults in this category.' These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader and impede smooth comprehension. Because the control over complex structures is poor and errors are pervasive, the appropriate descriptor matches a Band 5.0.
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