Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The data shown in the graph describes the number of individuals who spoke french to their childrens and the no of individuals who speak french language to their own childrens. In other words, this data clearly explains the generationalgap of the two french speaking generations. Generally speaking, graph represent the declining trend over all. The alastian language spoken habitually grabs the highest number of 400 thousans of individual who speak regional langual to their own children. Occitan comes at the 2nd number according to the data as 250 thousands individuals speak the language to their own children. Breton stands next to with almost 100 thousands individuals and Creole stands next in line with less than 100 thounds individuals. Corsican make the smallest portion of the chart almost 50 thounds individuals. Comparatively, parents who spkoe habitually regional language inherit the major population of regional language speakers in the next generation and vise versa.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by mentioning various data points from the charts, such as Alsatian, Occitan, and Breton. However, the interpretation of the data is confused and inaccurate, frequently misrepresenting the categories (for instance, misinterpreting the numbers of adults speaking to their children as the primary data and mislabeling the regional languages as 'french'). The overview provided ('graph represent the declining trend over all') is overly simplistic and fails to capture the full scope of the two charts. Furthermore, important data points and comparisons between habitual and occasional speakers are largely omitted. Because the information is poorly handled and contains factual misreadings of the visual data, this performance falls under Band 4.0 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is presented in a single, unformatted block of text without proper paragraphing, which significantly hinders readability and logical flow. While there are some basic cohesive devices attempting to link ideas (such as 'In other words', 'Generally speaking', and 'Comparatively'), the overall organization lacks a clear structure for an academic report. Reference words are sometimes confusing or used incorrectly (e.g., 'Corsican make the smallest portion' where subject-verb agreement and referencing fail). The progression of ideas lacks cohesion and clear staging, aligning best with Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by numerous lexical and spelling errors (e.g., 'childrens', 'no', 'generationalgap', 'alastian', 'thousans', 'langual', 'thounds', 'spkoe', 'vise versa'). The student struggles with basic word forms and collocations. Less common vocabulary is attempted but consistently inaccurate. While the meaning can sometimes be deciphered with effort, the errors strain the reader and reflect a limited lexical range characteristic of Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex constructions result in frequent errors. There are glaring grammatical and agreement issues throughout the text, such as 'The data shown in the graph describes...' followed by compound objects with inconsistent pluralization, 'graph represent', and 'Corsican make'. Punctuation is also sparse and sometimes faulty. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and reflect Band 4.0 limitations.
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