Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar charts illustrate the information about number of french people whose parents spoke with them in their regional languages on daily basis and occasionally and it further display the data that how many number of these french talk to their children in their nativelanguages nowadays. The study includes five native french languages:Aisatan, Breton, Creole, Corsican and Occitan.

Overall, its evident that Aisatan and Occitan are accounted as the most spoken language which was used for habitual commmuincation between parents and the french people in their childhood but the number of aisatan speakers reduce in occasional speaking while number of Occitan occaisional speakers has increased. Furthermore, Aisatan french language has recorded the highest figure speaking among french people and their children.

To begin with,in a speking language between french people and their parents, Occitan and Aisatan have almost or slightly more than 600 thousand speakers on everday basis. This figure surpasses almost 1 million in Occitan language but the number of aisatan speakers drop to almost 250 million in occasional speaking. Breton is the third most spekaing language and it has almost more than 250 speakers habitually but this number almost get double to 400 in occasional speaking.Other langauges, creole and Corsican have almost 100 habitual speakers and this number just rise slightly for Creole in occasional speking.

Moreoever, while Aistan is the most spaekable langauge between french peopel and their children and it has almsot 400 million speakers while Occitan is used among 250 million french peopel and their children

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The student attempts to address all parts of the task by reporting data from both charts regarding habitual and occasional speaking, as well as the intergenerational transmission to children. An overview is provided, noting key languages like Alsatian and Occitan. However, there are significant data misinterpretations and inaccurate figures reported throughout the text. For instance, the student states that Alsatian speakers drop to 'almost 250 million' and that Alsatian has '400 million speakers' when talking to their children, misreading thousands as millions on a massive scale. Furthermore, some comparisons lack precision. Despite these data errors and some under-developed trends, the main features are broadly outlined, satisfying the requirements for a Band 5.5 to 6.0 level of task completion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is arranged into discernible paragraphs with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, providing a coherent overall arrangement. Cohesive devices are attempted (e.g., 'Overall', 'To begin with', 'Furthermore'), but referencing and linking can be repetitive or awkward. Paragraphing is used, though the body paragraphs are dense and somewhat unorganised in how they group the data points. There is a lack of smooth progression between sentences, and referencing pronouns like 'it' and 'this' sometimes creates ambiguity. Overall, the organizational structure meets the criteria for Band 6.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The lexical range is limited and repetitive. The student uses basic vocabulary such as 'number', 'speak', 'people', and 'languages' frequently. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, including 'french' (uncapitalized), 'nativelanguages', 'Aisatan' (inconsistent spelling of Alsatian), 'commmuincation', 'occaisional', 'speking', and 'spaekable'. The misuse of 'million' instead of 'thousand' is a major lexical and scale error that impedes accurate communication of the data. The vocabulary is minimally adequate for the task, placing it at Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is weak. There are frequent errors in punctuation, capitalization, subject-verb agreement, and tense consistency (e.g., 'number of french people whose parents spoke...', 'number of aisatan speakers reduce', 'number of Occitan occaisional speakers has increased'). Run-on sentences are common, and articles are frequently missing or misused. While meaning can generally be parsed with effort, the high frequency of grammatical errors and inaccurate number scales prevents the response from achieving a higher band.

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