Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given chart is comparison between two generations about speaking French language.The graph tells us the number of parents who talk their mother language to their children and when the children grown up and speaks their language to their own children.
Two different situtions are discussed below and another graph is given with comparison of habitually spoken and ocassionally spoken.
The graph is between 0 to 1.2m population linked with 5 different languages.Aisatian and Occitan language is spoked by 600 adults whose paretns spoke their regional language to their childern.Although Occitan is used in above 1m people who spoke occasionally to their child.Almost 50 people spoke Corsican habitually but ontheother hand 100 people speaks ocassionally.
Second graph shows the numbering pf people who speakes their language to their own children.The ratio between people starts 0 to 600 using 5 languages.
Aisatian language is highly spoken by 400 people, secondly Occitan 250,other 3 languages have very minor differene.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The student attempts to describe the charts, but the response suffers from significant inaccuracies regarding the data. For instance, the text states that 'Aisatian and Occitan language is spoked by 600 adults', missing the distinction between habitual and occasional speakers shown in the first bar chart. Furthermore, data values are misread or misquoted, such as claiming '50 people spoke Corsican habitually' when the chart indicates 85 thousand, and confusing raw numbers with thousands (stating '100 people speaks ocassionally' instead of 105 thousand). While all parts of the visual information are touched upon superficially, the lack of accurate data interpretation, absence of a clear overall trend, and failure to properly synthesize the comparison between generations prevent this response from rising above a Band 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response lacks clear overall progression and logical paragraphing. The text is divided into four very short, fragmented paragraphs that do not logically group the data. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurate, such as abruptly starting sentences with 'Second graph shows...' or transitioning with 'ontheother hand' (written as a single word). Reference pronouns are also unclear in places, making it difficult to follow which demographic is being discussed. While there is a basic attempt to structure a report with an introduction and body points, the structural cohesion is generally faulty and mechanical, aligning with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple words like 'language', 'people', and 'graph'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'situtions', 'ocassionally', 'paretns', 'childern', 'ontheother', 'numbering', 'speakes', and 'differene'. Word choices and collocations are also frequently awkward or inaccurate, such as 'talk their mother language' instead of 'speak their mother tongue' or 'the ratio between people starts 0 to 600'. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for a standard academic task, causing noticeable strain for the reader and fitting Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There are multiple issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'children grown up and speaks their language' and 'Aisatian language is spoked'. Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic, exemplified by missing spaces after full stops ('language.The graph...'). Complex sentence attempts are frequently faulty. Because errors are very frequent and occasionally distort the intended meaning, the grammar fits the Band 4.0 descriptor level.
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