Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph illustrates how many people whose parents spoke to them in a French regional language in their childhood and after that how many of those adults talk to their own children in regional language.

Overall, most of adult parent's used to talked to them in Occitan language both in habitually and occasionally manners.Creole and Corsican was least spoken languages by parents. Although adult parent's spoke to them mostly in Occitan, adults speak to their children mostly in Alsatian.

Most adult parent's used to talk them in Occitan over 600 thousands habitually and over 1 million occasionally. While Aisatian was spoken by nearly 600 thousands, Creole and Corsican was spoken 100 thousand and below 100 thousand respectively in habitually manners by parents to adults when they were children. Moreover, Aisatian was spoken by over 200 thousand and Creole was spoken by over 100 thousand and Corsican was spoken about by 100 thousand people occasionally.

Furthermore, 400 thousand adults speak Alsatian to their children now while below 100 thousand adults speak creole and Corsican respectively. Around 250 hundred thousand people talk to their children in Occitan language.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons from the charts. An overview is attempted, noting key trends such as the prominence of Occitan in childhood and Alsatian for the next generation. However, some ideas are under-developed or lack precision. For instance, the data points are occasionally stated in a repetitive manner rather than fully synthesised, and figures such as the Occitan occasional category are not fully articulated. The response covers the essential information to satisfy the requirements of this level, though a more cohesive selection and comparison of data would be needed to reach a higher standard.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The writing exhibits a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to structure the report into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the specific data. Paragraphing is utilised to separate the different charts and categories. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty, seen in transitions like 'Furthermore' and 'Moreover', which do not always establish smooth logical bridges between sentences. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the internal progression within paragraphs lacks seamless flow. To improve, you should focus on more natural linking devices and ensure that relationships between data points are explicitly and smoothly connected.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

An adequate range of vocabulary is used to convey the information, such as 'habitually', 'occasionally', and 'regional language'. There are several attempts to use less common vocabulary, but these are accompanied by lexical inaccuracies and word-choice errors, such as 'adult parent's used to talked' and 'Aisatian' (misspelling of Alsatian). Errors in collocation and word form appear throughout the text, such as 'in habitually manners'. While these errors do not severely impede communication, they restrict the lexical score because precision and control are inconsistent. Expanding your control of precise descriptive vocabulary and accurate word forms will help elevate your lexical performance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms, such as the introductory relative clause structure. However, there are frequent grammatical errors in verb forms, prepositions, and pluralisation, including 'how many people whose parents spoke', 'Creole and Corsican was least spoken', and 'talk them in Occitan'. Punctuation is also occasionally neglected. While these errors rarely impede overall communication, they occur with enough frequency to keep the grammar at this level. To achieve a higher band, you need to produce a greater proportion of error-free complex sentences and exercise tighter control over subject-verb agreement and article usage.

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