Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the charts below show the number of french adults whose parents spoke a french regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a french regional language to their own children. If we see the average of people who speaks language habitually and spoken occasionally. The aisatian language speaks habitually people is 600 thousand and 250 thousand people spoken occasionally. The average of occitan language the people who spoke it around about 610 thousand. and who spoke occasionally is 1.5 million thousand. The language breton spoke habitually is 250 thousand people and who spoke occasionally 400 thousand people. The language creole people spoke habitually is 100 thousand and who spoke occasionally is 120 thousand people. The language people who spoke habitually 90 thousand and who spoke occasionally is 100 thousand.

If we check that the reading of adults who spoke language with children. If we check the reading of aisatian language there are 400 thousand adults who spoke with child. The reading of occitan language there are 250 thousand adults who spoke with child. The language breton spoken by people is around about 100 thousand people adult spoke with child. the creole language that is spoke by 80 thousand adult people who spoke with child. The corsican language that is spoken by 50 thousand adult with child.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response addresses the task only minimally and relies heavily on copying instructions directly from the prompt, with a significant portion of the text being lifted verbatim. Furthermore, data is selected and reported in a very mechanical and repetitive fashion, listing figures without providing a clear, overarching overview or meaningful comparisons. While some data points from the charts are mentioned, such as the figures for Alsatian and Occitan, many of the specific numbers and labels are inaccurate or confused (for instance, misinterpreting scale values). To move to a higher band, the writer needs to present a clear overview of main trends, select and compare key features accurately, and avoid copying the rubric.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organization present, with the writing split into two paragraphs corresponding broadly to the two charts, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. The response lacks effective cohesive devices, relying instead on repetitive sentence starters like 'The language...' and 'If we check...'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow within paragraphs is disjointed and mechanical. To improve coherence and cohesion, the student should use a wider variety of linking words and transitional phrases to connect ideas smoothly, ensure referencing is clear throughout, and structure the report with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, heavily reliant on words directly copied from the prompt such as 'regional language', 'parents', and 'children'. There are frequent instances of unnatural word choices, awkward phrasing, and word formation errors, such as 'speaks language', 'spoken occasionally', and 'aisatian'. These lexical limitations and errors strain the reader and restrict the response to a basic communicative level. To achieve a higher band, the student must develop a broader range of vocabulary related to data reporting, use less common lexical items with greater precision, and improve control over spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing displays a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting mostly of simple, repetitive clauses that fail to showcase complex grammar. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people who speaks language'), missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and improper capitalization (e.g., 'french', 'aisatian', 'occitan'). Punctuation is also problematic in places, with sentence fragments or run-on structures. To progress, the writer needs to incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence forms while improving basic grammatical accuracy to ensure meaning is not distorted.

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