Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts provides the information for the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French to them when they were children through both categories, spoken habitually and occasionally and the number of adults who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Overall, it id evident that Occitan language recorded the highest figure, whereas Corsican language had the lowert figure.Futhermore, the number of adults who were native french speaker used Alsatian language most considerably. The number of adults was measured in thousands.

For, people who spoke habitually recorded the hightest figure for Occitan to around 610k, followed by Alsatian 600k.The Breton, Creole and Corsican experienced 280k, 200k and 180k apice.

people who spoke occasionally recorded the hightest figure for Occitan to around 1m, followed by Alsatian 220k.The Breton, Creole and Corsican experienced 400k, 110k and 100k apice.

However, the number who speak a French regional language to their own children made up 400k for the Alsatian language, Occitan covered to around 250k, The Breton, Creole and Corsican experienced 190k, 180k and 70k respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the prompt only partially and fails to meet the minimum length requirement, falling short by seven words, not including the 32 words copied directly from the prompt. While the student attempts to cover the three categories presented in the charts, the data points reported contain significant inaccuracies and misreadings of the graphs. For instance, the habitual figure for Occitan is stated as around 610k rather than the correct 620k, and occasional speakers for Alsatian and Breton are inaccurately reported. The overview attempts to highlight main trends, noting that Occitan recorded the highest figures while Corsican had the lowest, but the underdeveloped and inaccurate details prevent the response from achieving a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation present in the report, with an introductory sentence and separate paragraphs attempting to handle different data categories. However, the overall progression is disrupted by mechanical and faulty cohesive devices, such as repetitive sentence openings like 'The Breton, Creole and Corsican experienced...' used across multiple paragraphs. Paragraphing is attempted, but referencing and logical flow between ideas remain weak. The lack of a clear, unified overview structure and repetitive structural patterns mean the text does not progress smoothly, keeping it restricted to a lower band level.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, though minimally adequate for conveying basic comparative ideas. There are several noticeable lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as 'lowert' instead of lowest, 'Futhermore' instead of furthermore, and 'apice' instead of apiece. The student attempts to use some less common phrases like 'habitually' and 'occasionally', but these are accompanied by recurring spelling errors and imprecise phrasing that cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve, the writer needs to broaden their vocabulary range and ensure correct word forms and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and repetitive descriptive frames. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, marred by missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and grammatical inaccuracies such as 'The charts provides' where subject-verb agreement fails. Frequent errors are present throughout the text, including punctuation slips and awkward clause constructions like 'For, people who spoke habitually recorded...'. These frequent errors frequently distract the reader and reflect a lack of control over more advanced grammatical patterns.

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