Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.0)
This bar show that numberous of french adults whose roots spoke french regional lauguage to them when in their childhood and also shows that the number of french lauguage to their own youngster Alsatian 600 thousand adults spoken habitually while 230 thousand occasionally and 400 thousand who speaks regional to their own children. Occitan 600 thausand adults spoken habitually while .1.08 Million occasionally and 250 thousand who speak regional language to their children. Breton 270 thousand adults spoken habitually while 400 thousand occasionally and 90 thousand who speaks regional language to their children.Creole 100 thausand spoken habitually while 120 thousand occasionally and 80 thousand speaks regional langaude to their children. Corsican 80thousand spoken habitually while100 thousand occasionally and 60 thousand speaks regional language to children
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response attempts to present data from the charts, but it fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, coming in at only 125 words. Furthermore, the selection of data is erratic and incomplete, and there is a total absence of an overview or concluding summary comparing the trends. While the student lists several figures for Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole, and Corsican, the data is presented in a fragmented, note-like list rather than a properly structured academic report. The lack of proper development and failure to meet the word count limitation restrict the response to a minimal level of task accomplishment.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
The response lacks a coherent overall arrangement and proper paragraphing. Instead of using clear paragraphs with an introduction, body, and overview, the text is crammed into a single block of disjointed sentences and lists. Cohesive devices are virtually absent, leading to a complete lack of logical progression and flow between ideas. References and transitional phrases are missing, making the text read as a series of disconnected data points rather than a cohesive written piece. This places the response at a very basic level for cohesion and logical organisation.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on the exact terms provided in the prompt such as 'adults', 'habitually', 'occasionally', and 'regional language'. There are frequent spelling mistakes and word form errors throughout the text, such as 'numberous', 'lauguage', 'youngster', and 'thausand'. While the student attempts to name different languages and categories, the limited range and frequent lexical inaccuracies result in strain for the reader, fitting the profile of a basic vocabulary range with noticeable errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mainly of fragmented, incomplete clauses rather than fully formed sentences. There are frequent and severe errors in basic grammar, including missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and faulty subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This bar show that numberous of french adults', 'Alsatian 600 thousand adults spoken habitually', and 'who speaks regional langaude'). Punctuation and sentence boundaries are largely ignored, with multiple clauses running together incorrectly. These frequent errors frequently distort meaning and demonstrate poor control over basic sentence patterns.
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