Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The following graphs compares which consists of five different names; French adults whose parents spoke a native French language to them when back when they were children and number of parents who speak it as a regional language to their own children. Additionally, the numbers are measured in thousands.
Overall, by looking at the bar graph,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 2.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 2.5
The response falls significantly short of the minimum word requirement of 150 words, containing only 56 words and cutting off mid-sentence ("Overall, by looking at the bar graph,"). Because of this extreme brevity, the task is addressed only minimally and fails to present any body paragraphs, data comparisons, or a complete overview of the charts. While the opening attempt touches upon what the graphs compare, the severe lack of development and incomplete nature of the response mean it sits firmly at the lowest levels of task achievement. To improve, the student must ensure they write at least 150 words, fully describe the main trends, and complete all sentences and paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
The text begins with some organizational awareness by attempting an introductory sentence and an overall summary marker ("Overall, by looking at the bar graph"). However, because the text stops abruptly after just a few words, it is impossible to evaluate paragraphing, logical progression, or cohesive devices across a full essay. The incomplete final clause leaves the structure broken and disconnected. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to write multiple cohesive paragraphs that logically sequence information about the regional languages and maintain clear progression from an introduction to body details and a conclusion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used in the fragment is relatively basic and repetitive, though it attempts some topic-related phrasing such as "French adults", "regional language", and "children". There are awkward phrasings and redundancies, such as "which consists of five different names; French adults whose parents spoke a native French language to them when back when they were children", where words like "when back when" demonstrate clumsy expression. The limited amount of text makes it difficult to assess a wider lexical range. To improve, the student should expand their vocabulary with precise reporting verbs and synonyms, and eliminate repetitive or clumsy phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The opening sentence attempts a complex structure ("The following graphs compares which consists of five different names..."), but it contains grammatical confusion and poor relative clause management. Additionally, the phrase "when back when they were children" contains redundant time markers. Because the response is cut off so early, there is very little grammatical structure to assess. To progress, the writer must demonstrate better control over complex sentence patterns, avoid structural confusions, and ensure that all sentences are grammatically complete and punctuated correctly.
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