Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.0)

These two bar chart illustrates the comparison between french adults, whose parents use to speak in french regional vs number of parents who speak french regional with thier own children.

Overall occitan made a significant contribution in spoken habitually and occasionally, whereas corsican accounted for a smaller share,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the two charts and gives a brief overview, noting that Occitan is prominent in the childhood figures and Corsican is comparatively small. However, it does not describe the main data in enough detail: there are no figures, no comparisons between habitual and occasional speech, and no account of how many adults speak each language to their own children. The overview is also incomplete, since Occitan is not the largest in both childhood categories: it leads occasional use, while Alsatian is close to it in habitual use. The report is only 48 words, well below the required 150, so the task is addressed only minimally. Include a clear overview and several accurate, selected comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the first sentence introduces the charts, and the second begins an overall summary with “Overall.” This gives the reader a simple starting point, but the response ends before any supporting details or comparisons are presented, so there is no developed progression from overview to data. The relationship between the two charts is also not clearly explained. To improve, use a short introduction, a distinct overview, and one or two body paragraphs grouping the childhood figures and the figures for adults speaking to their children. Connect comparisons explicitly, for example by contrasting occasional with habitual speech.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “comparison,” “habitually,” “occasionally,” and “accounted for a smaller share.” These choices show an attempt to describe chart data, but the range is very limited because the report is so short, and several phrases are inaccurate or awkward. “Parents use to speak in french regional” does not clearly express the chart’s meaning, while “made a significant contribution” is not a natural way to describe a category’s figure. Use precise terms such as “regional languages,” “spoke to them,” “number,” and “was highest.” Check spelling and capitalisation of language names, including French, Occitan, and Corsican.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a complex opening sentence and an overview sentence, but grammatical control is inconsistent. In “These two bar chart illustrates,” the demonstrative and noun are plural while the verb is singular; write “These two bar charts illustrate.” The phrase “whose parents use to speak” has an incorrect verb construction for a past childhood habit, and the sentence lacks a clear grammatical structure around “in french regional.” The second sentence is more controlled, using “whereas” to contrast two points, although it remains a fragment-like overview because it gives no supporting detail. Practise accurate plural agreement and past-tense forms, then build complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs.

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