Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar charts show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Overall, the trend in number of adults whose parents spoke regional language to them in childhood is same to adults who speak a regional language to their own childeren . 400,000 adults spoke alsatian to their childern while [redacted phone] adults had parents who spoke Alsatian habitually to adults in their childhood and above [redacted phone] spoken occasionally.

Other than Occitan which was spoken widely over [redacted phone] adults whose parents spoke when spoken habitually and above 1.5 million spoke occasionally, but only [redacted phone] adults speak with their children.

The graph HAD SAME TREND through languages, alsatian, occitan, breton creole and coriscan respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two charts and mention several relevant languages, but the report only partially describes the data and has no clear, accurate overview. The claim that both charts have the “same” trend is misleading: Occitan is highest for childhood exposure, whereas Alsatian is highest for speaking to children, and the figures generally fall sharply between generations. Some figures are also inaccurate: Occitan spoken occasionally is about 1.065 million, not above 1.5 million, and the number speaking it to their children is about 250,000, not 400,000. The response is 103 words, below the required 150, so important comparisons and details are missing. Include a concise overview and compare the main values accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has separate paragraphs and attempts to group information, which gives it a basic structure. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the second paragraph moves from Alsatian to a broad claim about the overall trend, and the next begins “Other than Occitan” without making the relationship to the previous point clear. The final sentence simply lists the languages and repeats that they have the same trend, rather than summarising the key comparisons. Linking words such as “Overall” and “Other than” are attempted, but the latter is not used effectively here. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview, and detail paragraphs, grouping the languages or chart series consistently.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “bar charts,” “habitually,” “occasionally,” and “regional language,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “spoken widely” and “same trend.” Spelling errors in “childeren” and “coriscan,” along with inconsistent capitalisation of “alsatian,” reduce accuracy. Some wording also makes comparisons difficult to interpret, for example “whose parents spoke when spoken habitually.” Aim for precise language for describing quantities and changes, and check spelling and standard forms of language names. This would make the report clearer without requiring unusually advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “Other than Occitan,” but control is uneven and the range of structures is limited. Errors include “the trend … is same,” which is missing an article and has an awkward grammatical construction, and “adults whose parents spoke … to adults in their childhood,” where the sentence structure obscures who is speaking to whom. The second paragraph also contains an incomplete or poorly connected clause after “when spoken habitually.” Punctuation is inconsistent, including a space before a full stop. Use complete, direct sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check articles and clause connections when combining comparisons.

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