Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chats illustrate the number of french grown up whose parents spoke french regional language to them when they were kids and the number who of them speak to thier own kids a regional french language, in thousands .

Overall, comparing the two generations we can see that the first generation spoke highely with thier children habitually and occasionnaly in Occitan and the less french regional langauge is Corsican. However ,most of the second generation spoke with thier kids Alsatian.

The biggest proportion of the first generation

used habitually and occasionally the Occitan french regional language over 600 thousand, 1 million . Then , Alsatian is used habitually by 400 thousand similar to the number of the french users occasionally Breton. Then it shifted , Breton habitually and Alsatian are both around 300 thousand user . Creole language is used habitually and occasionally by around 200 thousand and more then 200 thousand . In the last place Corsican used habitually and occasionally by around 1 thousand .

The second generation used most Alsatian by 400 which stead . then ,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the two generations and gives an overview that Occitan is prominent among adults whose parents spoke a regional language, while Alsatian leads for those speaking to their own children. However, the report only minimally covers the data and several comparisons are inaccurate or unclear. For example, Occitan was spoken occasionally by about 1,065,000 adults, but the habitual figure was about 620,000; the phrase “over 600 thousand, 1 million” does not clearly distinguish these. Alsatian habitual use was about 600,000, not 400,000, and Corsican figures were around 85,000 and 105,000, not “1 thousand.” The final-generation section is unfinished. Select the main contrasts accurately and complete the comparison across all five languages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the report into an introduction, an overview and detail paragraphs, and sequencing expressions such as “Overall,” “Then” and “In the last place” show an effort to guide the reader. Nevertheless, information is not arranged coherently enough: the first-generation figures are mixed together, and the paragraph shifts between languages and speaking habits without a consistent pattern. The final sentence, “The second generation used most Alsatian by 400 which stead. then,” is incomplete and leaves the report without a clear ending. Organise the details by generation or by language, use clear comparisons, and ensure each paragraph develops a complete point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “generation” and “proportion,” so the reader can recognise the subject and intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the report difficult to follow: “bar chats,” “french grown up,” “the less french regional langauge,” and “which stead.” Repetition of “used” and “spoke” also limits precision, while “proportion” is not suitable for describing these absolute numbers. Use accurate terms for the chart’s categories and vary reporting verbs and comparison language. Careful proofreading of spelling and collocations would make the meaning more reliable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer structures, such as “Overall, comparing the two generations we can see that…” and “Then it shifted,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and frequent errors sometimes distort meaning. Examples include “the number who of them speak,” “the first generation spoke … with their children,” and “Alsatian is used habitually by 400 thousand similar to the number…” The final clause is also incomplete, so its grammatical relationship is unclear. Articles, sentence boundaries, agreement and clause construction need more consistent control. Build clear sentences around one comparison at a time, and check that each sentence has a complete subject and verb.

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