Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrate the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional lanuage to their own children.

Firstly, Number of adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood. The Alsatain and Occitan language which they spoken habitually is the huge number of parents whose spoke with their children's in childhood the number of them around 600k. In the contrast of these two same language they spoken occasionally is Alsatian is lower than Occitan the number demonstrate us around 300k and 1.1M. While, others languge like Breton, Creole, and Corsican these all languages spoken was very low habitually and occasionally.

Secondly, The number of adults who speak a regional languge to their own childhood. The chart demonstrate us that The Alsatian languge on the top on chart. According to chart report Alstain language spekers around 400k in their own childhood. While, Others had a normal amount speakers. Whereas, Corsian language speaker were in very low quantity around 98k which less than 100k.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify both charts and make a relevant attempt to compare the languages, including the high figures for Occitan and Alsatian and the lower figures for Breton, Creole and Corsican. However, key details are inaccurate or unclear: Alsatian was spoken habitually by about 600,000 adults, but Occitan was slightly higher at about 620,000; occasionally, Occitan was far higher than Alsatian (about 1.065 million versus 240,000), not simply 1.1 million versus 300,000. In the second chart, Alsatian is highest, but Corsican is about 60,000, not 98,000. The overview is also limited, and the response does not reach the 150-word minimum: 145 words were counted, excluding 36 words copied from the prompt. Add a clear summary of the main contrasts and report the figures accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic, recognisable structure: an introduction followed by sections beginning “Firstly” and “Secondly.” This helps the reader distinguish the two charts, and you attempt comparisons using phrases such as “In the contrast” and “While.” However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because several sentences combine unclear claims, and the links between ideas are often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, “While, others languge like Breton, Creole, and Corsican these all languages spoken was very low” does not clearly separate the comparison or explain which figures are being compared. Use one paragraph per chart, group the figures into meaningful comparisons, and connect complete, clearly referenced sentences rather than relying mainly on sequencing words.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “number,” and “speakers,” so the reader can recognise the subject and intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, making parts of the report hard to interpret. Phrases such as “the huge number of parents,” “normal amount speakers,” and “in very low quantity” do not describe the data naturally; the chart counts adults, not parents. There are also repeated spelling errors in key terms, including “languge,” “Alstain,” and “Corsian.” Build a more precise set of chart-reporting expressions, such as “the figure for,” “was considerably higher than,” and “the smallest total,” and check the spelling of language names.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences and use contrast clauses, for example, “While, others…” and “Whereas, Corsian language speaker…,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure and agreement occur throughout: “The chart illustrate” needs a plural subject with a singular verb, while “these all languages spoken was” has mismatched number and an incomplete verb construction. The phrase “the number of adults who speak a regional languge to their own childhood” also has an unclear grammatical relationship; the task concerns speaking a language to their own children. Articles, plurals and punctuation are often missing or misplaced. Practise writing complete simple sentences first, then add accurate contrast clauses and check subject–verb agreement.

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