Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart givining the idea about people of france whose spoke regional language to thier children.there are many languages that was spoken as a regional language in france.Languages are corsican, creole, Breton, occitan and aisatian.

Now we can higlight on the numbers of adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood. 90 thousands adult spoke corsican habitually and 200 thousands adult spoke occasionally. 200 thousands adult spoke creole habitually and occasionally as well. 295 thousands adult speak breton habitually and 400 thousands adult spoken occasionally. Moreover, 600 thousands adult

speak occitan habitually and 1million adults spoke occasionally.The last regional language was aisatian 600 thousands adult spoke habitually and 220 thousands spoke occasionally. Now move forward and see how may adults who speak a regional language to their own children.60 thousands can speak in corsican and 80 thousands can speak creole. 90 thousands speak breton to thier own child and 240 thousands can speak occitan. most people 400 thousands can speak aisatian

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The report identifies the five languages and includes figures for both childhood exposure and adults speaking to their own children, so it is relevant to the task. However, several figures are inaccurate: for example, Occitan spoken occasionally is about 1,065 thousand, not 1 million; Breton spoken habitually is about 260 thousand, not 295 thousand; and Alsatian spoken occasionally is about 240 thousand, not 220 thousand. Creole is also reported as 200 thousand for each childhood category, whereas the chart shows about 105 thousand habitually and 120 thousand occasionally. The response gives no clear overview of the main patterns, such as Occitan’s high occasional use and the lower figures for speaking languages to children. Select and summarise the key comparisons more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic sequence: the opening names the languages, the next section discusses childhood use, and the final section turns to speaking to children. Phrases such as “Now we can highlight” and “Now move forward” signal these shifts, but the progression is largely a list of figures rather than a clearly organised report. The opening and body are not separated into well-defined paragraphs, and there is no overview to guide the reader through the most important comparisons. Some links are mechanical, while the final figures are crowded together. Group the information into an introduction, an overview, and focused comparison paragraphs, using linking language to show contrasts rather than simply announce the next item.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses enough basic vocabulary to identify the chart’s subject and report quantities, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” and “to their own children.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “speak” and “adult spoke” repeated throughout. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “givining,” “thier,” “higlight,” and “aisatian,” which reduce the accuracy and polish of the report. Some phrases, such as “the chart giving the idea,” are not natural ways to describe visual data. Use standard chart-reporting language and vary verbs carefully—for example, “the figure stood at” or “the number fell to”—while checking spelling and language names.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences are simple, and frequent errors in sentence formation, agreement, articles, and punctuation make the report less controlled. For instance, “The chart givining the idea about people of france whose spoke…” is not a complete, well-formed introduction, while “there are many languages that was spoken” has an agreement error. In “90 thousands adult spoke,” the number phrase and noun form are not handled correctly, and several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation, as in the transition to “60 thousands can speak.” The response does communicate many of its intended comparisons, but the narrow range and recurring errors limit clarity. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using structures such as “whereas” and “compared with.”

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