Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar charts compare 5 French regional languages used by 2 French generations.

Overall, the first generation used most Occitan language occasionally and habitually, the least regional french used by the same generation is Corsican however the number decreased as well .The data shows that the language transported by the children of the first generation to thier kids is Alsatian ,and the least one is Corsican which stayed used by same number of people over generations.

Occitan is the most regional language used in the first generation by over 1million parents to thier children ,However most of thier children when they grew up and had kids only less than 300 thousand used Occitan with them. Contrary to Alsatian language which was the second used by the first generation by 600 thousand, 400 thoudand of them continue to speak it with thier children.

the three other languages Breton, Creole and Corsican weee used by the first generation by around 400 thousand and approximitly 200 thousand and less .And it declined slightly between the grandparents and the parents.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main pattern that Occitan was most common among the older generation and that Alsatian was comparatively well maintained in transmission to children. You also note that Corsican was the least common in the later generation. However, some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: Occitan was spoken habitually by about 620,000 adults, but its occasional use was much higher, at roughly 1.065 million; the response does not distinguish these figures clearly. The claim that Corsican “stayed used by same number” is incorrect, as it fell from about 190,000 combined reports across the two categories to around 60,000 speaking it to their own children. The final comparison of Breton, Creole and Corsican is vague. A clearer overview and accurate, selected figures would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs comparing Occitan and Alsatian before mentioning the remaining languages. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression is weakened by long, crowded sentences and unclear links between ideas. For example, the overview combines the most and least common languages with a claim about change across generations, while “the three other languages” groups together figures without explaining their relative patterns. Connectors such as “however” and “contrary to” are used, but the comparisons they introduce are not always precise. Organise the details into clearer comparisons, and use referencing that makes each generation and language explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “regional languages,” “generation,” “occasionally,” and “declined,” and you attempt to describe comparisons with phrases such as “the second used.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the report awkward or unclear. “The language transported by the children” does not naturally describe language transmission; “passed on” or “spoken to” would be more suitable. Likewise, “the least regional french used” and “stayed used” are imprecise. Spelling errors such as “thier,” “thoudand,” and “approximitly” are noticeable. Build a more accurate set of chart-reporting expressions and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “however” and a relative clause in “which stayed used by same number of people.” Nevertheless, errors in sentence construction and punctuation are frequent enough to make some relationships difficult to follow. For instance, “the least regional french used by the same generation is Corsican however the number decreased as well” joins several ideas without clear punctuation, and “the language … is Alsatian, and the least one is Corsican” has an unclear grammatical relationship to the preceding clause. Articles and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “by same number” and “the three other languages … weee used.” Use shorter, complete sentences first, then add controlled comparisons with accurate articles, verb forms and punctuation.

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