Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar charts illustrate the number of French residents whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were young and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Overall, occitan has recorded the highest number of adults whose parents who spoke a regional language to them in childhood and corsican recorded the lowest number of adults in both the category. Alsatian reached the topmost level and corsican had lower number of speaker.

Occitan recorded the highest number of adults whose parents who spoke a regional language to them in childhood in both the category around 600 and 1.1m followed by alsatian and berton approximatelly 600 and 400. Alsatian reached the topmost level in adults who speaks a regional language to their children around 400 and followed br occitan that comes in second around 250.

Aduls perfer three language the most speaking to thier children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two chart topics and make an attempt at an overview, noting that Corsican is generally lowest and that Alsatian leads for adults speaking to their children. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: Occitan, not Alsatian, has the highest childhood figures overall when habitual and occasional speech are considered together, while Corsican is lowest. Some comparisons are also misreported or incomplete, and the final statement about adults preferring three languages is unsupported by the charts. The response is only 110 words, below the required 150, so several key comparisons are left undeveloped. To improve, give a clear overview and accurately compare the main figures across both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, beginning with an introduction and then moving to an overview and selected details. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview repeats information and the detail paragraph shifts between the two charts without a clear comparison. For example, “Occitan recorded the highest number” is followed by figures for Alsatian and Breton, then the focus changes to adults speaking to their children. The final sentence about “three language” is disconnected from the preceding data. Organise the report into a clear overview followed by separate, logically ordered comparisons, and use linking phrases to show how the figures relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “illustrate,” “category,” “highest number,” and “followed by,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the report less precise, such as “topmost level,” “speaker,” “perfer,” and “approximatelly.” The phrase “three language” is also unclear in this context. Use standard, precise expressions for describing data, such as “the largest figure,” “the fewest adults,” and “approximately,” and check spelling and word forms. Avoid repeating “number of adults” when a concise alternative such as “figure” or “total” would make comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response includes simple statements and some attempts to combine information, but sentence structures are limited and grammatical errors are frequent enough to make parts difficult to interpret. For example, “whose parents who spoke” contains an unnecessary relative pronoun, while “corsican recorded the lowest number of adults in both the category” has problems with number and sentence construction. In “adults who speaks,” the verb does not agree with its plural subject, and “Alsatian reached the topmost level and corsican had lower number” is missing an article before “lower number.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and plural forms, then build comparisons using clear, complete sentences.

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