Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar charts illustrate number of french middle aged people whose parents use french regional language to communicate with them when they were in teenage and number of adults who spoke a french local langauge to thier own kids.

Overall, corsican and creole were the least prefered languages by parents to speak with adults when they were children, whereas alsatian and occitian languages are used more to comminunicate. However, occitan language recorded height figure in term of speaking regional language occasionally.Similar trend followed by an adults who speak regional language to thier own children.

Number of adults whose parents used to speak in a local language to them in child

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the broad topic and offers an overview, noting that Corsican and Creole are among the least common languages and that Occitan is highest for occasional use. However, it only addresses the charts minimally: it gives no supporting figures, omits the key comparison between parents’ use and adults’ use with their own children, and the claim that Alsatian and Occitan are generally used more is too broad because the figures differ by habitual and occasional use. The final line is an incomplete heading rather than a report. The response is also 40 words below the required minimum, leaving the main features substantially undeveloped. Include a clear overview and several accurate comparisons with approximate data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction and an overview, and “Overall” and “However” signal relationships between ideas. Nevertheless, the report has no developed body paragraphs or logical progression through the chart information. The overview moves from least-preferred languages to the occasional-use peak and then to an unsupported statement about the second chart, without explaining the comparisons. The final line, “Number of adults whose parents used to speak in a local language to them in child,” is an unfinished fragment and does not function as a paragraph or conclusion. Organise the report into an introduction, a concise overview, and body paragraphs comparing the two sets of figures; use linking expressions to show clear relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “bar charts,” “occasionally,” “languages,” and “figure,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “least prefered languages by parents,” “height figure,” and “Similar trend followed by an adults.” Repeated use of “speak” and “language” also makes the wording basic. Spelling errors—including “french,” “langauge,” “thier,” “occitian,” and “comminunicate”—are noticeable and reduce clarity. Aim for precise reporting expressions such as “the lowest figures,” “the highest number,” and “the number of adults who passed the language on to their children,” while checking spelling and avoiding unsupported claims about preference.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few complex structures, particularly the opening sentence and the contrast introduced by “whereas,” but the range is limited and errors occur frequently. The introduction lacks an article in “illustrate number,” and its tense and clause structure are awkward: “whose parents use … when they were in teenage.” The overview also has agreement and article problems in “Similar trend followed by an adults,” while “Occitan language recorded height figure” is not a complete, well-formed reporting clause. The final line is a sentence fragment. These issues sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to follow. Practise complete sentences with accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and past-tense reporting forms, and proofread each sentence for a clear main clause.

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