Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts given below illlustrates a given number of adults from France whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children divided in two parts spoken habitually and spoken occasionially. Moreover the data of adults who speak a French regional language to thier own children.The French regional language include Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole and Corsican.

Overall the number of Alsatian and Occitan speakers who spoke habitually are more compared to others. Whereas the number of Occitan speakers were the highest who spoke occasionally. While the lowest number of speakers were the Corsican speakers who spoke daily and were the lowest . Additionally the number of Alsatian speakers were the highest when the adults spoke to thier own childern.

Firstly the number adults whose parents spoke regional language to them habitually includes Occitan speakers were the highest with 601,000, followed by Alsatian with 600 thousand. Additionally the number of Breton speaking parents close to 300 thousand.Compared to Speaking occasionally were more which are 400 thousand.The occitan speakers were close to 1 million and Alsatian were 250,000.The Creole and Corsican speakers were both close to spoken habitually and speaking occasionally to 100,000.

Whereas the number of Alsatian adults who spoke to thier childern were the highest with 400,000. Followed by Occitan adults with 250,000 speakers. Compared to Breton which are at 98000 and Creole speaking adults with around 80,000. And finally were the lowest who spoke Corsican.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and provide an overview, identifying Occitan as the largest category for occasional parental speech and Alsatian as the leading language passed on to children. Several comparisons are relevant, including the roughly 400,000 Alsatian adults speaking to their children and about 250,000 for Occitan. However, some figures and descriptions are inaccurate: habitual Occitan is about 620,000, not 601,000; occasional Occitan is about 1,065,000, rather than merely “close to 1 million”; and Breton habitual speech is about 260,000, not close to 300,000. The claim that Corsican was the lowest for both parental habits is also misleading, since Creole is lower for habitual speech. Develop the overview with the broad contrast between the two parental-speech categories and transmission to children.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for parental speech and speech to children. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression within the first data paragraph is difficult to follow. For example, “Compared to Speaking occasionally were more which are 400 thousand” does not clearly identify the language or make the comparison, and the shift between habitual and occasional figures is abrupt. Linking words such as “Additionally,” “Whereas,” and “Compared to” are sometimes used mechanically or without a complete comparison. Improve cohesion by grouping each language’s habitual and occasional figures together, then moving to the child-speaking chart, and use clear references such as “the corresponding figure” where appropriate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “followed by,” and “the highest,” so the main categories and comparisons are generally understandable. However, the range is repetitive, particularly in repeated uses of “number,” “speakers,” and “highest,” and some expressions are imprecise or awkward, such as “spoken daily” for habitual speech and “close to spoken habitually.” Spelling errors—including “occasionially,” “thier,” and “childern”—also reduce accuracy. Choose precise terms for the chart’s categories and vary comparison language: for example, describe figures as “the largest,” “the smallest,” or “approximately” a stated amount. More accurate collocations would make the report clearer and more formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the reader can usually understand the intended comparisons. However, some sentence structures are incomplete or poorly controlled. “Additionally the number of Breton speaking parents close to 300 thousand” lacks a main verb, while “Compared to Speaking occasionally were more” does not form a clear grammatical comparison. There are also agreement and article problems, as in “the number of Alsatian speakers were,” and several sentences begin with “Whereas” or “And finally” without being joined to a complete clause. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check singular agreement: “the number … was.” Punctuating and combining related figures carefully would improve control while retaining a useful mix of sentence forms.

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