Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

There are two charts provided for elaborating the information for a lecturer at university. The first chart demonstrates about the adults whose parents communicate with them in local language in their childhood. There are two cases about speaking occasionally and speaking on regular basis. Alastian is one of the adults whose parents often have conversation with him in their native language but not regularly. But, when we see his case speaking with his childrens in local language it is around 300. If we have a look at the occitan, his parents, also have communication with him in local language but more oftenly. And he speaks to his children less than Alastan in their regional language. In case of Breton, it is evident from the chart that his parents spoke oftenly in local language but he himself speaks less in regional language with his children. Creole and Corsican parents almost chatted with them in local language very less and same they as with their childs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies both charts and makes relevant comparisons, including that adults generally speak less to their own children than their parents spoke to them. However, the report only addresses the data minimally: it gives no clear overview of the main pattern and omits important comparisons across the five languages. Some details are inaccurate or unclear. For example, the first chart separates habitual and occasional speech, but the discussion of Alsatian does not clearly distinguish these figures; the claim that Creole and Corsican parents spoke “very less” also overlooks the substantial occasional figures for both. The estimate of about 300 for Alsatian children is below the chart’s approximate 400. A stronger response would summarise the overall decline and accurately select the largest and smallest figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence from the first chart to individual languages, and phrases such as “If we have a look at” and “In case of” signal movement between points. However, the ideas are not arranged into a clear report structure: there is no distinct overview, and the language-by-language discussion does not establish a consistent comparison between childhood exposure and speaking to children. Repeated openings such as “In case of Breton” and “Creole and Corsican” make the progression feel list-like, while references such as “his case” and “same they” are difficult to follow. Grouping the data into an introduction, an overview, and comparison paragraphs would make the information easier to understand.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary, including “regional language,” “occasionally,” and “regular basis,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, sometimes making the meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “elaborating the information,” “more oftenly,” “spoke oftenly,” and “chatted with them … very less.” The language labels are also misspelled as “Alastian” and “Alastan,” and “childs” is not the correct plural. Use precise chart-reporting expressions such as “the number of adults,” “spoke habitually,” and “passed the language on to their children,” and check spelling of the language names.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, for example, “But, when we see his case speaking with his childrens in local language it is around 300,” and uses subordinate clauses such as “when we see” and “if we have a look.” However, these attempts are often faulty, and sentence control is inconsistent. Problems include missing or misplaced articles and possessives (“in local language,” “his childrens”), agreement and reference (“Creole and Corsican parents … same they”), and awkward clause construction that obscures the intended comparison. Punctuation is also uneven, with unnecessary commas after “But” and “his parents.” Build accuracy first with clear subject–verb sentences, then combine them using controlled clauses such as “Although …, …” or “By contrast, ….”

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