Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two bar graph shows, the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were childern and the number who speak a french regional language to their own childern. At a glance , corscian language is the least spoke language in both graphs.

To began with, there are two types spoken habitually and spoken occasionally for whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood. Alsatian and Occitan language both are eqaully spoken habitually by 600 in thousands but in spoken occasionally Alsatian is just around 300 in thousand where Occitan is widely spoken by 1 million in thousands . However, Breton is spoken habitually by approximately by 300 in thousand respectively and occasionally by 400 in thousand . Moreover, Creole and corsican language are least spoken language where in habitually is 100 and approax 90 in thousand and around 150 and 100 in thousand in occasionally.

The number of regional language to their own children, the first and widely spoken is Alsatian spoken by 400 in thousand where Occitan is spoken around by 250 in thousand. However, the data of Breton , Creole , corsican language has similar number of adults approximately 90 , 80 and 50 in thousands.

To sum up , the data showing language spoken highest in French regional is Occitan for occasionally and Alsatian language by adults to their own children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and identify useful headline features: Corsican is among the smallest categories, Occitan is highest for occasional parental speech, and Alsatian leads in speech to children. However, some figures and comparisons are inaccurate. Habitual Alsatian is about 600, while Occitan is about 620, so they are close but not equal; occasional Alsatian is about 240, not 300, and Creole is about 120, not 150. Corsican is not the least in every category, since Creole is lower for speech to children. The overview is also incomplete: it should clearly compare the two parental-speech categories with the much smaller figures for the next generation. More accurate selection and explanation of key contrasts would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to the parental-language figures, then the figures for adults speaking to their children, and finally a summary. This makes the two charts reasonably easy to follow. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and linking words are used mechanically or awkwardly. For example, “However” introduces comparisons that are not contrasts, while “Moreover” adds information without clarifying its relationship to the previous point. The final sentence repeats selected details rather than drawing together the main pattern across both charts. Use clearer topic sentences and group figures by meaningful comparisons, with linking expressions that accurately show contrast, addition or consequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “approximately” and “number of adults,” so the reader can generally understand the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “least spoke language,” “widely spoken by 1 million” and “language spoken highest.” Repetition of “spoken” and “language” also makes the report less precise. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “childern,” “corscian,” “eqaully” and “approax,” which reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Build a more varied set of data-reporting expressions, such as “the figure stood at,” “was the largest category” and “was spoken to children by,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including comparisons joined with “where” and “however,” but complex constructions are often faulty and errors occur frequently. For example, “The two bar graph shows” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “To began with” uses an incorrect verb form. In “Alsatian and Occitan language both are eqaully spoken habitually,” the sentence structure and agreement are difficult to control. Articles, plurals and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “in thousand” and the spaces before commas. These errors sometimes make relationships between figures harder to follow. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then add controlled comparisons using forms such as “whereas” and “while.”

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