Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph illustrates number of French adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood and number of adults who speaks a regional language to their own children.

Overall, Languages are: Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole and Corican. Thousands of adults are their whose parents spoke these languages to them in childhood, it had be spoken habitually and occasionally. However, thousands of adults are also their who speak these languages to their own children.

First graph explain, adults parents spoke languages to them in childhood incllude, Occitan langauage were largely spoken occasionally around 1 million whereas Alsitian and Occitan languages were largely spoken habitually. Although, Corsican language spoke least in both circumstances around 150 and 200 million among all five languages.

Second graph shows, adults speak languages to their own children include that, they speak Alsatian language more around 400 million, on the second, Occitan language speak around 250 million. Ultimately, Corsican language are least speak around 50 million among all five languages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both charts and mention several relevant features, including Occitan’s high occasional figure and Alsatian’s leading figure for adults speaking to their children. However, the account is only minimally developed: it gives no clear, accurate overview of the main pattern across the two charts, and several comparisons are missing. The statement that Corsican was spoken least “around 150 and 200 million” is inaccurate: the childhood figures are about 85,000 habitually and 105,000 occasionally, while the figure for speaking to children is about 60,000. Also, “Alsatian and Occitan” were not both the largest habitual categories; Occitan and Alsatian were close, at roughly 620,000 and 600,000. Select the key highs and lows and report them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, a general statement, and separate paragraphs for the two charts. Phrases such as “Overall,” “First graph,” and “Second graph” help signal the intended sequence. However, the ideas within paragraphs are not arranged clearly, and the overview mostly repeats that the charts contain language figures rather than summarising their main patterns. Some links are awkward or unclear, as in “Although, Corsican language spoke least,” and “Ultimately” does not establish a meaningful relationship with the preceding comparison. Organise the report around a concise overview followed by accurate comparisons, and use linking expressions only where they clarify how the figures relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bar graph,” “habitually,” “occasionally,” and “least,” so the reader can recognise the subject and some comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear: “languages are their,” “were largely spoken,” and “language speak around 250 million” are not natural ways to describe the data. There are also spelling errors in “Corican,” “Alsitian,” and “incllude.” Use precise chart-reporting language such as “the figure for,” “was the highest,” and “was spoken to children by,” and check spelling of the language names. This would make the comparisons clearer and more appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer structures, including “Although, Corsican language spoke least…” and “Second graph shows…,” but most sentences rely on simple, incomplete patterns, and errors frequently obscure the intended relationships. Examples include “number of adults … and number of adults who speaks,” where the article and subject–verb agreement are faulty, and “it had be spoken,” which has an incorrect verb form. Several clauses lack a clear grammatical subject or verb, as in “Occitan langauage were largely spoken occasionally.” Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and practise agreement, articles, and past-tense forms. A wider range of accurate sentence patterns would make the report easier to follow.

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