Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts illustrates number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

There are 2 different charts for number of adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood and 1 chart of numbers of adult who speak a regional language to their own children.

There are five types of languages spoken occasionally and habitually languages spoken mostly in number of adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood are Alsatian and occitan with an average ratio of 600 thousands habitually but occasionally the number of Alsatian decreases to 200k and the occitian increases up to 1 million.most least used languade is corsian and creole in both they are around only 200 thousand.Number of adultswho spoke a regional language to their own children are way less. The number of alsatian speakers are about 400 thousand which is the most used language between the new generation Breton,creole and corsian all are below 100 thousand.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two comparisons and mention several relevant languages, including Alsatian, Occitan and Corsican. However, the report is incomplete and does not give a clear, accurate overview of the main patterns. For example, Alsatian is about 600,000 habitual and 240,000 occasional, while Occitan is about 620,000 habitual and 1,065,000 occasional; describing Alsatian as decreasing to 200,000 and Occitan as rising to 1 million is imprecise and does not explain the two categories clearly. The claim that Creole and Corsican are both around 200,000 is also inaccurate, particularly for habitual speech. The figures for speaking to children are partly reported, but Occitan is omitted. The response is 129 words, below the 150-word minimum. Add a concise overview and compare the key figures accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic sequence: it introduces the charts, discusses languages spoken to adults in childhood, and then turns to languages spoken to children. This gives the reader some sense of the topic. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the opening repeats the task description rather than establishing a useful overview. The long third sentence combines several comparisons, making the relationships between habitual and occasional speech difficult to follow. Linking is also limited, and phrases such as “in both” have unclear reference. Separate the introduction, overview and detailed comparisons, and use clear transitions such as “By contrast” when moving to the figures for the next generation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “number,” and “most used.” These terms show an attempt to discuss frequency and compare categories. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear: “average ratio” does not describe the figures, and “most least used” is not a clear comparison. There are also spelling errors in language names, including “occitian,” “languade,” and “corsian,” and the repeated use of “number” and “language” makes the report less precise. Use standard spellings and chart vocabulary such as “figure,” “total,” “highest,” and “lowest,” while avoiding unsupported terms such as “average ratio.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, and the overall topic can usually be understood. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes distort the relationships between ideas. The opening says “The charts illustrates,” where the plural subject requires “illustrate.” Other examples include “number of adult who speak” and “the number of Alsatian decreases,” which need plural agreement or a clearer construction. The sentence beginning “There are five types…” is incomplete and difficult to parse, while missing spaces and punctuation in “1 million.most” and “adultswho” further disrupt reading. Aim for shorter, complete sentences with accurate subject–verb agreement, articles and punctuation before attempting longer comparisons.

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