Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two bar charts compare the numbers of french adults whose parents spoke reigonal languages to them during childhood and those who speak reigonal languages to their children.

Overall, the two reigonal langauges which had a high rate of being spoken to in their childhood and those who spoke to their children are Alsatian and Occcitan while Creole and Corsican are on the latter side in both occasions.

Looking at the languages spoken to in their childhood , the figure shows a clear difference between the languages which was spoken to adults by their parents. Occitan recorded the highest number of adults from 600 thousand who spoke out of habit and more than 1m adults reported it was spoken occasionaly in their household, whereas the languanges such as Creole and Corsican were reported by no more than 100 thousand people in both categories.

Turning to the number of adults who speak these languages to their own children, alsatian ranked first followed by occitan which was followed breton,creole and corsican. Alsatian had over 400 thousand adults who spoke the language to their children while occitan had only 250 thousand. Similar to the earlier trend breton, creole and corsican only had adults no more than 100 thousand who spoke the language to their children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the two charts and give an overview that highlights the prominence of Alsatian and Occitan, as well as the lower figures for Creole and Corsican. Several comparisons are relevant, including Occitan’s high childhood figures and Alsatian’s leading position among adults speaking to their children. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: Occitan’s habitual figure is about 620,000, not 600,000 exactly, and the statement that Alsatian had “over 400 thousand” speaking it to their children overstates the chart, which shows about 400,000. The overview also groups Alsatian and Occitan as the highest in both charts, although Alsatian leads the second chart and Occitan is second. More precise comparisons across the two childhood categories and the later figures would make the report more complete and better supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The report is organised into a clear introduction, overview and two body paragraphs, with the childhood data discussed before the figures for adults’ own children. Transitions such as “Overall,” “Looking at,” and “Turning to” make the progression easy to follow, and the ranking in the final paragraph helps the reader compare the second chart. To strengthen cohesion further, make some links between the charts more explicit rather than relying on broad phrases such as “Similar to the earlier trend.” That comparison is not fully clear because the ranking changes: Alsatian leads the second chart, while Occitan has the largest occasional childhood figure. More precise referencing and a clearer connection between the two sets of data would make the progression more consistently effective.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “recorded the highest number,” “ranked first,” and “followed by,” which helps describe rankings and comparisons. However, spelling errors are noticeable, including “reigonal,” “langauges,” “Occcitan,” and “occasionaly,” and these reduce the accuracy of the report’s vocabulary. Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural: “on the latter side” is unclear, and “spoken out of habit” does not accurately express “spoken habitually.” Repeated use of “number,” “adults,” and “spoken” also limits flexibility. Aim for accurate spelling and more precise chart language, such as “the figure for” and “used occasionally,” while retaining the useful comparison vocabulary you already demonstrate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in the opening and a contrastive sentence beginning “whereas.” Most of the meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. For example, “the languages which was spoken” has a plural subject with a singular verb, and “which was followed breton” is missing “by.” The phrase “the number of adults … who speak” also shifts tense from the past description of childhood to the present without a clear reason. Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and an unnecessary space before one comma. Check subject–verb agreement, verb tense consistency and sentence punctuation, then proofread complex sentences to ensure each clause is complete.

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