Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The two provided data below illustrate the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French language to them during their childhood and the number of parents who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Overall, it is immediately apparent that the proportion of parents who spoke their language habitually to their children differ from parents who spoke their language occasionally, while the other chart displays wheather their language still exist or not.

Regarding the initial chart, it shows that Corsican was the lowest share among other languages in both cases and stood at around 150 thousands, wheras Occitan language experienced the gighest proportion which accounted for more than one million for those who spoke it occasionally and about more than 600 thousands for those people who spoke it habitually.

Turning to the second chart, Alastian was the largest sharre at just 400 thousands. while corsican was

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the two charts and makes a relevant comparison, noting that Occitan is highest in the childhood data and that Alsatian leads the figures for speaking to children. However, several details are inaccurate or unclear: Corsican is not the lowest in both childhood categories, since its figures are about 85,000 habitually and 105,000 occasionally, while Creole is lower in the habitual category. The claim that Corsican stood at around 150,000 is also inaccurate. The overview that the second chart shows whether languages “still exist or not” does not describe what the chart measures. The report is unfinished and contains only 129 words, below the 150-word minimum; 20 prompt words were excluded from the count. Include a complete account of the second chart and accurate key comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the report: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs beginning “Regarding the initial chart” and “Turning to the second chart.” These signposts help readers recognise the intended sequence. However, progression is limited because the overview is vague and does not summarise the main patterns, and the final paragraph stops after “while corsican was,” leaving the comparison incomplete. Some linking is also awkward: “while” joins ideas without a complete second clause, and the transition from the first chart to the second does not develop the comparison. To improve, use a clear overview followed by complete, logically ordered comparisons, and ensure each paragraph reaches a finished point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “proportion,” and “accounted for,” showing an attempt to describe chart data rather than relying only on basic words. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this task: “a French language” is too broad where “a regional language” is intended, and “whether their language still exist or not” misrepresents the chart’s subject. Spelling errors such as “wheather,” “wheras,” “gighest,” “Alastian,” and “sharre” are noticeable and reduce precision. The range is adequate for basic reporting but not consistently controlled. Use standard chart language such as “number,” “figure,” and “spoke to their children,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms, for example, “Occitan language experienced the gighest proportion which accounted for more than one million…” However, control is uneven. In “the proportion … differ,” the singular subject requires “differs,” and “Corsican was the lowest share” uses an awkward grammatical construction; a clearer form is “Corsican had the lowest figure.” The sentence beginning “while corsican was” is incomplete, and the overview’s clause about whether the language “still exist or not” has an agreement error. Punctuation is also inconsistent, including the lower-case “while” after a full stop. Build complete sentences, check subject–verb agreement, and use punctuation to separate comparisons clearly.

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