Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart focused on the number of french adults whose parents spoke a french regional language to them in their childhood and the number who speak a french regional language to their own childern.

Firstly, the significant data from the chart illustrates the spoken habitual and spoken ocasionally in which occitan is the dominant language spoken occasionally as well as habitually alot while on the other hand, aisatian is less common occasionally but is spoken habitually alot according to given data. But as seen to the other languages which have very less influence in the spoken culture if reflecting habitually or occasionally which includes Breton, Creole and Corsican respectively.

Secondly chart describes the number of adults, in which aisatian is the most popular language spoken to the children while occitan is the second most spoken and remaining Breton, Creole and Corsican are not much significant in the population of adults to communicate with their children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify both parts of the chart and make relevant comparisons, including that Occitan is highest among the childhood figures and Alsatian leads for adults speaking to their children. However, the report is only 130 words, below the required 150, and the data are described too generally to give a clear account. For example, “the remaining Breton, Creole and Corsican are not much significant” groups three languages together without showing their relative figures or comparing the two childhood categories. The claim that Alsatian is “less common occasionally” is also misleading: its occasional figure is lower than Occitan’s, but it is not the lowest overall. Include an overview and several accurate, selected figures to make the key patterns clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, a paragraph beginning “Firstly,” and another beginning “Secondly.” This helps the reader recognise that you are discussing the two chart topics. However, the ideas within the first body paragraph are crowded into a long sentence, and the comparison between habitual and occasional speech is not clearly organised. Phrases such as “But as seen to the other languages” make the relationship between points difficult to follow, while “respectively” does not clearly map the languages to a specific comparison. Use separate sentences to group the main childhood figures, then discuss transmission to children, with clear links such as “by contrast” and “in comparison.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “dominant,” “habitually,” “occasionally,” and “popular,” and the reader can generally identify the languages and trends you mean. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or repetitive: “alot,” “very less influence,” and “not much significant” do not express the comparisons naturally. There are also spelling errors in “french,” “childern,” “ocasionally,” and “aisatian,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for precise terms such as “highest,” “lowest,” “approximately,” and “the number of adults who passed the language on to their children.” Check spelling of language names and avoid repeating “spoken” where a more concise phrase is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt longer sentences and use sequencing expressions, but control of sentence structure is uneven. The sentence beginning “Firstly, the significant data from the chart illustrates…” contains several clauses joined without clear grammatical links, and “But as seen to the other languages” is not a complete, well-formed comparison. There are also problems with articles and phrasing in “in their childhood” and “the spoken habitual and spoken ocasionally,” as well as inconsistent sentence punctuation. Most of the response relies on simple patterns such as “X is the most popular” or “Y is the second most spoken,” so the range remains limited. Build shorter, accurate sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using “whereas” or “while.”

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