Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The chart below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a french regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a french regional language to their own Children.

First of all the number of Spoken Hobitually they different types of language first of language Alsatian precent the 600 and the Occitan language the same number of 600. And the Breton show the number of about 250. The Creole language show the Spoken Habitually 100 and the Corsican language show the about 95 the Spoken Habitually.

Secondly show the Spoken occasionally the Alsatian languade show the about 250 and the Occitan language 1.1m and the Breton language 400 and Creole language about 220 and the last Corsican language 200.

And the number of adults the speak language to their own childeren different speak language Alsatian language present 400 and trhe Occitan language show the number of about 250 and the Creole language show the 70 and the Corsican language show the about 60.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the two chart topics and reports several relevant figures, including about 600,000 for Alsatian habitual use, 1.1 million for occasional Occitan use, and 400,000 adults speaking Alsatian to their children. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the main patterns, and some figures are inaccurate: occasional Creole and Corsican are about 120,000 and 105,000, not 220,000 and 200,000. Breton in the final chart (about 90,000) is omitted. The report is also below the required 150 words; the 33 words copied from the prompt do not count. These omissions and inaccuracies leave the task only minimally covered.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it first discusses habitual speech, then occasional speech, and finally language use with children. The transitions “First of all,” “Secondly,” and “And” help signal these sections, so the reader can follow the broad order. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear, well-developed paragraphs, and the repeated sentence pattern “the … language show” makes the report feel like a list rather than a connected comparison. Some references are also unclear, as in “the number of Spoken Hobitually they different types of language.” Grouping the figures by chart and adding a concise overview would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses relevant chart vocabulary such as “habitually,” “occasionally,” “number,” and “language,” and it attempts to distinguish the categories shown. However, the vocabulary is basic and highly repetitive, especially the repeated use of “show” and “number.” Several spelling errors, including “Hobitually,” “languade,” and “childeren,” reduce accuracy, while phrases such as “the same number of 600” and “present the 600” are not natural ways to report data. Use precise reporting verbs and comparison language, for example “stood at,” “was higher than,” or “approximately.” This would improve clarity and give the report a more appropriate academic style.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts simple statements and some sequencing, but sentence structures are very limited and errors occur throughout. The opening says “The chart below show,” where the subject and verb do not agree; it also uses “a french regional language” with inconsistent capitalization. Other examples include “the number of Spoken Hobitually they different types of language” and “the number of adults the speak language,” where sentence structure and verb forms make the meaning difficult to follow. Many clauses lack a clear subject or complete grammatical pattern, and punctuation does little to separate ideas. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and articles. More accurate simple sentences should come before attempts at longer structures.

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