Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph chart illustrates the counting of french adults whose parents spoke a French regional language with their children when those in there growing age. a proportion that people who speak french language with their own children.

Overall, well Aisatian and Occitan is remain same in the speaking habitually on the other side Alsatian language is the less in occasionally and the Occitan spoke more than in the occasianally well in Breton is gradually increase in occasionally and the last two language remain same in the both conditions.and the adults guide their children so Alastian is on the top and the Corsican is most of the lower spoken language.

The Alastian language and Occitan spoken habitually is the same on 600 hundren thousand and in the occasionally Alsatian spoken by people is on the 220 and the Occitan 1.1M and Creole or Corsican is remain same in the Habitually and occasionally.

Furthermore, Alsatian Language spoke with their children is most like 400 thousand adults and the Occitan is on 230 thosand adults and the Coriscan is lower spoken language in the chart.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response recognises that the charts compare adults’ childhood exposure to regional languages with the number who pass them on to their own children, and it identifies some relevant extremes, including Alsatian at about 400,000 in the second chart and Corsican as the lowest. However, the account of the first chart is often inaccurate or unclear: Alsatian and Occitan are not the same in habitual use, and the figures for occasional use are not consistently reported. The overview also says several languages “remain same,” although the charts show different values across the two measures. Important comparisons between the charts are largely missing. To improve, give a clear overview of the main patterns, then report accurate, selected figures for both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the report into an opening, an overview and further details, and words such as “Overall” and “Furthermore” signal some progression. However, the ideas are not arranged coherently enough: the overview combines several comparisons in one long sentence, and the later paragraphs repeat or contradict claims, such as saying values “remain same” without making clear which languages or measures are being compared. References such as “both conditions” and “the chart” are also vague when two charts are involved. Use one paragraph for the childhood figures and another for transmission to children, with a separate, concise overview. Link comparisons explicitly and avoid repeating unclear claims.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “adults,” and “spoken language,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or spellings make the report difficult to interpret: “graph chart,” “counting,” “guide their children,” “Aisatian,” and “occasianally.” Phrases such as “is the less in occasionally” do not express the intended comparison naturally. Aim for precise chart-reporting language and check the spelling of language names. Useful alternatives include “number of adults,” “spoke the language regularly,” “passed the language on,” and “the lowest figure.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to form longer sentences and use comparison structures, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently obscure relationships between the figures. Examples include “Alsatian and Occitan is remain same,” “the Occitan spoke more than in the occasianally,” and “Alsatian language spoke with their children is most like 400 thousand adults.” These show problems with subject–verb agreement, verb forms, sentence construction and articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly where clauses run together. Build accurate simple sentences first—for example, “Occitan was spoken occasionally by about 1.1 million adults”—then add comparisons using “whereas” or “by contrast.” Check that each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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