Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar charts below illustarte the propotion of French adults whose parents spoke a French native language to them when they were kids and the propotion who speak a French native language to their own kids.

Overall, the ratio of three french native langauges including breton, occitan and alsatian spoken habitually and occasionally by parents to their kids in their childhood is higher.On the other side the ratio of two french native langauges including creole and corsican spoken habitually and occasionally is lower.However French adults whoes parents spoke two french native langauge Occitan adn alsatian to their own kids is more then other three langauges which are breton,creole and corsican.

By contrasting spoken habitually and ocassionally french native languages taught by parents to their kids in thier childhood.The Alsatian language is higher about 600 kids by which this language is spoken habitually while lower about 250 kids by which this language is spoken habitually.Then Occitan is spoken occasionally by 1.5M kids is higher while spoken habitually is about 600.Breton spoken ocassionally by 400 kids while spoken habitually by 600 kids.Creole spoken habitually and ocassionally by 100 kids.Corsican is spoken occasionally silghtly higher by 100 kids while spoken habitually by 90 kids.Moreover parents who speak native langauges to their own kids.Among them alsatian is spken by 400 peoples,occiatan is spoken by 250 peoples, breton is spoken above 90 by peoples,creole is spoken by 90 peoples and corsican is spoken by 80 peoples.

In conclusion alsatian and occitan languages taught by parents to their kids in their chilhood and to their own kids is higher then other languages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two comparisons and include an overview, noting that Alsatian and Occitan are prominent and that fewer adults pass Creole and Corsican on to their children. However, the overview is not consistently accurate: Breton is also relatively high in the childhood figures, while Occitan’s occasional figure is the largest at about 1,065 thousand. Several details are misreported: Alsatian is about 240 thousand when spoken occasionally, not 250; Breton is about 260 thousand habitually, not 600; and the figures for adults speaking languages to their own children are approximately 400, 250, 90, 80 and 60 thousand respectively. The report addresses the charts but selects and describes data only partially, with some comparisons unclear. Prioritise accurate key figures and a concise, data-based overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an overview, a paragraph of details and a conclusion, so there is some attempt to organise the report. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow: the overview combines childhood figures with transmission to the next generation, and the detail paragraph shifts between languages and chart series without a consistent pattern. Linking expressions such as “On the other side,” “However” and “Moreover” are used, but they do not always show the relationship between the information clearly. The conclusion largely repeats the overview rather than adding a useful summary. Group the two charts separately, compare the languages in a consistent order, and use clear references such as “In the first chart” and “In the second chart” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “spoken habitually,” “spoken occasionally,” “ratio” and “in conclusion,” which helps communicate the topic. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural. “French native language” is not the same as “regional language,” while “kids” and “peoples” are too informal or unsuitable for this report. Repeated use of “higher” and “lower” also makes comparisons imprecise; figures should be described as larger or smaller, or as the highest and lowest. Spelling errors such as “illustarte,” “propotion,” “langauges” and “ocassionally” are noticeable and sometimes slow the reader. Use precise chart vocabulary and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and use contrast, but complex constructions are often faulty, and sentence boundaries are not controlled consistently. For example, “By contrasting spoken habitually and ocassionally…” is a fragment, while “However French adults whoes parents spoke two french native langauge … is more then other three langauges” has an unclear subject and faulty agreement. The opening sentence also repeats “the proportion” without a clear grammatical comparison. Missing punctuation after introductory phrases and inconsistent capitalisation further affect readability. Build each comparison around a clear subject and verb, for example, “Occitan was spoken occasionally to about 1,065,000 adults.” Practise accurate simple sentences before combining them with clauses.

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