Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart compares the number of french adults whose parents spoke a local language to them when they were children and the number who speak a french regional language to their own kids.

Overall,it occitan had biggest trend up in whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood.Whereas,Alsatian is higher tendency in who speak a regional language to their own. While corsican marked all time low in two given categories.

An analysis of the image reveals that In spoken habitually Alsatian and Occitan were relatively equal at 600 thousands of adults.Bretom marked nearly 250 thousand adults and creole and corsican were least at upto 100 adults in creole and around 70 thousand adults for corsican.

In Spoken occasionally,Occitan was popular spoken it is more than one million people.Followed by Breton second popular speaking occasionally it is 400 thousands.

Creole and Corsican at relatively equal it is around 102 and 100 .and Alstian shows 250 thousands people spoken .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two measures and give an overview that points to Occitan as the largest category in the childhood data and Corsican as the smallest, which are relevant features. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: Alsatian, not Occitan, is highest among adults speaking a language to their own children, while Corsican is not the lowest in every childhood category (Creole is lower in habitual speech). Several figures are also misreported, including Alsatian at about 250,000 rather than 240,000 occasionally, and Corsican at about 70,000 rather than 85,000 habitually. The response also omits the figures for speaking to children. At 124 words, it is 26 words below the required minimum, limiting coverage of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for habitual and occasional speech. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is grouped. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview contains unclear phrasing, such as “biggest trend up,” and the final paragraph ends without a clear comparison or conclusion. Linking is limited and sometimes awkward: “Whereas” and “While” do not connect smoothly to the preceding sentence, and several ideas are joined with full stops or “and” without clear relationships. Use a consistent sequence—overview, childhood figures, then figures for adults speaking to their children—and connect comparisons explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “relatively equal,” and “popular,” and the reader can generally identify the categories being discussed. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which makes some comparisons hard to interpret. For example, “biggest trend up” does not describe the highest figure, and “higher tendency” is not a suitable way to report a count. There are also spelling errors in language names, including “Bretom” and “Alstian,” and “local language” is less precise than “regional language.” Aim for accurate chart-reporting expressions such as “recorded the highest figure,” “stood at,” and “was followed by.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer structures, including the opening sentence and the contrast beginning “Whereas,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns and several are incomplete or difficult to parse. For instance, “Overall,it occitan had biggest trend up…” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “Followed by Breton second popular speaking occasionally it is 400 thousands” is a fragment with unclear clause relationships. Errors also occur with articles, agreement, and number forms, as in “Alsatian and Occitan were relatively equal at 600 thousands.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and sentence openings such as “In spoken habitually.” Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, plurals, and punctuation.

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