Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.0)

THE LINE GRAPH ILLUSTRATE THE NUMBER OF FRENCH ADULTS WHOSE PARENTS SPOKE A FRENCH LANGUAGE TO THEM WHEN THEY WERE CHILD AND THE NUMBER WHO SPEAK A FRENCH REGIONAL LANGUAGE TO THEIR CHILDREN .

OVERALL, IN SPOKEN HABITUALLY THERE ARE FIVE LANGUAGE . IN SPOKEN HABITUALLY THERE ARE SIX HUNDRED PEOPLE WHO SPEAK AISATIAN LANGUAGE, WHILE ANOTHER OCCITAN LANGUAGE SPOKEN PEOOPLE HAS SAME NUMBER OF PEOPLE WHO SPEAK ALSATION. THE NUMBER OF PEOPLE WHO SPEAK BRETON LANGUAGE IS LESS SPOKEN WHILW IT HAS 250 PEOPLE. ANOTHER TWO LANGUAGE HAS LESS PEOPLE WHO SPOKEN THERI LANGUAGE IN HABITUALLY ONE IS CREOLE HAS ONE FIFTY PEOPLE WHO SPEAK THEIR LANGUAGE AMOYHER IS CORSICAN HAS 100 PEOPLE.

AT FRIST, IN SPOKEN OCCASIONALLY THERE ARE ALSO SAME LANGUAGE AS SPOKEN HABITUALLY. THE NUMBER OF PEOPLE WHO SPOKEN OCCASIONALLY ALSATION HAS DECREASE THEN THE PEOPLE WHO SPOKEN HABITUTALLY ALSATION LANGUAGE IT HAS 250 PEOPLE. SPOKEN OCCASIONALLY PEOPLE SPEAK OCCITAN LANGUAGE IS MORE THERE ARE ONE MILLION PEOPLE

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the topic and attempts to compare habitual and occasional speech, but it reports only part of the chart and contains several inaccurate figures. For example, it gives Alsatian occasional use as 250 rather than about 240, and says Creole habitual use is 150 rather than about 105; it also describes Occitan as having the same habitual figure as Alsatian, although the chart shows approximately 620 versus 600. The report omits the figures for adults speaking each language to their own children and does not provide a clear overview of the main patterns. It is also 9 words below the 150-word minimum. To improve, cover both charts, select the key comparisons accurately, and include a concise overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some basic organisation: an opening statement is followed by paragraphs beginning “OVERALL” and “AT FRIST,” which signals an attempt to structure the report. However, the information does not progress clearly through the charts. The overview paragraph mixes individual figures with general statements, and the final paragraph stops after discussing Alsatian and Occitan, leaving the other categories and the second chart unaddressed. Linking phrases such as “while” and “another” are attempted, but references like “the people who spoken habitually Alsation language” are difficult to follow. Group the information by chart or by meaningful comparisons, and use clear topic sentences and references so each paragraph has a distinct purpose.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “regional language,” “habitually,” “occasionally,” and language names, so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the range is narrow and repetitive, especially the repeated use of “people who speak” and “language.” Several word choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “spoken habitually” where “spoken regularly” or “habitually spoken” would be more natural, and “has decrease” where “fell” is appropriate. Spelling errors such as “AISATIAN,” “ALSATION,” and “AMOYHER” also reduce clarity. Use precise chart-reporting terms such as “figure,” “number,” “approximately,” and “compared with,” and check spelling of category names.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts longer sentences and uses basic comparison structures, for example, “while another Occitan language…” and “The number of people who…”. However, grammatical control is weak: errors in subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and verb forms occur repeatedly. Examples include “The line graph illustrate,” “there are five language,” and “the number … has decrease.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, with long, loosely connected clauses that make relationships unclear. Aim first for accurate simple sentences, such as “Occitan was spoken habitually by about 620,000 adults.” Then practise combining these with controlled comparisons using “whereas” or “while,” checking agreement and tense in each sentence.

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