Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar charts given below illustrate the thousands of French young men whose parents spoke a regional language French to them when they were children and the thousands of parents who speak french regional language when they were child.

overall, when parents spoke a regional lanuage to them in childhood the most spoken language is Occitan in both spoken habitually and occasionally while corsican is less spoken regional language by parents to them in childhood. Moreover, parents who speak a regional language to their own children was Alastian while Corsican was also less spoken language in that category.

In detail, parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood that were spoken habitually language Alastian and Occitan that were 600thousands but if we talk about occasionally spoken language was occitan around 1.1mthousand but Alastian down to only 250thousand. Spoken language Corsican and Creole were the less spoken language were almost 100thousand in both occasionally and habitually spoken. Breton were spoke with the figure of 280thousand and 400thousand in both habitually and occasionally respectively.

When parents speak language to their children were 400thousand and 250thousand in which Alastian and Occitan respectively. Moreover, others a regional language speak to their children was less that 100thousand in which include Corsican, Creole and breton.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main pattern that Occitan is highest in the childhood figures and Corsican is among the lowest, and you also compare the two largest figures for speaking to children. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: Occitan is not highest for habitual speech (Alsatian is about 600,000 versus Occitan at about 620,000, so they are close), and the figures for Alsatian occasionally are about 240,000, not 250,000. The overview also calls Alsatian the most spoken to children, although it is the highest at about 400,000; this point would be clearer if stated as a comparison with Occitan. Cover the chart categories more precisely and distinguish the two childhood series from the figures for speaking to children.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable report structure: an introduction, an overview, and two detail paragraphs. This gives the reader a basic route through the information, and phrases such as “Moreover” and “In detail” signal transitions. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because comparisons are compressed into long, loosely connected sentences. For example, the sentence beginning “In detail, parents spoke…” combines habitual and occasional figures without consistently identifying which value belongs to which language. The repeated use of “Moreover” also makes linking mechanical. Group the figures into clear comparisons, use one sentence for each series where helpful, and make references such as “that category” explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart-report vocabulary, including “illustrate,” “habitually,” “occasionally,” and “figure,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or awkward, such as “less spoken regional language,” “were spoke with the figure,” and “others a regional language speak to their children.” These choices sometimes make the intended comparison difficult to interpret. There are also spelling inconsistencies in “French,” “language,” “Corsican,” and “Alsatian.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and use terms such as “the least commonly spoken” or “the number of adults who spoke…” rather than repeating “spoken language.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses basic comparison structures, but control is limited: many sentences contain errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, or sentence construction. For example, “Breton were spoke” should use a singular subject with a correct passive form, while “parents who speak … was” has a mismatch between subject and verb. The opening sentence also shifts awkwardly between past and present (“spoke” and “speak”), and several clauses are joined without clear grammatical structure. These errors can make relationships between figures hard to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses such as “whereas” and “while”; check tense and subject–verb agreement in each sentence.

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