Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart compares the number of adults in thousand whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood or number of adults in thousands who speak a regional language to their own children. overall, there is a big difference in between them far fewer adults who spoke the regional language to their children than had heard it from their parents in childhood. The Alsatian language was spoken at a great extent but now its strength is very low. The Occitan language was spoken in occasionally very high but in habitual was a little low and the pie chart below shows that now this language is almost negligible. Both pie chart shows that the other three languages which are Breton, Corsican or Creole was spoken as minimum and now also they have no importance and people do not speak these languages it means the regional languages are become extinct.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad contrast between adults who heard regional languages from their parents and those who now pass them on, and you mention several of the languages. However, the report is incomplete and contains important misreadings: Occitan was not “a little low” in habitual use (about 620,000), and it was the highest for occasional use (about 1.065 million). Alsatian was not the most widely heard overall, and the figures for adults speaking these languages to their own children are not negligible in the way suggested. The claim that the languages are becoming extinct is too strong for the data. The response is also 10 words below the 150-word minimum. Include a clearer overview and accurate comparisons across both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the charts, gives an overall comparison, and then comments on individual languages. This provides some direction, but the ideas are compressed into one paragraph and the comparisons are not organised clearly by chart or by language. Repeated use of “now” and “and” makes the progression feel loose, while “the pie chart below” is an unclear reference and the visuals are bar charts. Separate the introduction and overview from the detailed comparisons, then group the figures logically—for example, compare the two largest languages before describing the smaller ones. Clearer paragraphing and more precise linking would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “regional language,” “habitual,” and “occasionally,” and the reader can understand the general topic. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “spoken at a great extent,” “its strength is very low,” and “have no importance.” “Pie chart” is also an incorrect label for the visuals, and “minimum” does not naturally describe the smaller figures. These choices sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. Use precise chart language and collocations, such as “the figure for,” “was spoken occasionally,” “declined,” and “the lowest number,” while avoiding unsupported claims about importance or extinction.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses, as in “far fewer adults who spoke the regional language to their children than had heard it from their parents,” but the sentence is not grammatically complete. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries: “in thousand” should be “in thousands,” “Both pie chart shows” needs plural agreement, and the opening “overall” should be capitalised and separated appropriately. The final sentence joins several ideas without clear punctuation, making the relationships difficult to follow. Most structures are simple, with limited accurate variety. Practise complete comparative sentences and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation before submitting.

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