Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The below chart show the information the number of French adults whose parents spoke a frech regional to them when they are childeren and the number of speak french regional language to their own childeren.

Number of adults in thousands and parenets spoke a regional language to them in childeren. The two types of language the first language of habitually and the second language of occasionally. Show the Alsation language habitually percentage of 600, and the occasionally percentage of about of 250, Occitan the same percentage of 600, and the occasionally show the percentage of 1.1m, and the Breton show the habitually language show the percentage of about 250, and the occasionally present the language of percentage of 400, the Creole language show the percentage of 100,and the occasionally language of about 120, the Corsican about the percentage of 95,and the occasionally language the percentage of 100.

Secondly, precentage the numbers of the thousands the regional language the childerens. The alsatian language show the 400 thousand and the occitan language about 250 thousands and the breton precent the about 90 thousands, Creole language show the about 75, and the Corsican show the about 60 thousands.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies both parts of the visual and reports several relevant figures, including the high occasional figure for Occitan and the lower numbers for Creole and Corsican. However, it mainly lists values rather than summarising the key patterns, and there is no clear overview of the main comparisons. Some figures are also inaccurate: Alsatian spoken occasionally is about 240, not 250; Breton spoken habitually is about 260, rather than 250; and Corsican spoken occasionally is about 105, not 100. The figures for adults speaking to their own children are mostly close to the chart. To improve, give a concise overview—for example, Occitan leads in occasional childhood exposure, while Alsatian has the highest figure for speaking to children—and select accurate comparisons to support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it first discusses childhood exposure and then introduces the figures for adults speaking to their own children with “Secondly.” This gives the reader some sense of the two chart sections. However, the first section is largely a long chain of language-by-language statements, with repeated use of “and” and “show,” so comparisons and relationships between figures are difficult to follow. The opening sentences also repeat the task description without establishing a clear overview. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the two sets of data, and group languages by meaningful similarities or contrasts. More precise linking and reference would make the progression clearer and less list-like.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “regional language,” and “thousands,” and the language names help identify the data being described. However, vocabulary is basic and highly repetitive, especially the repeated phrases “show the percentage” and “language show.” Several choices are inaccurate for this chart: the figures are numbers of adults, not “percentages,” and “the regional language the childrens” does not clearly express the second chart’s subject. Spelling errors such as “frech,” “childeren,” “Alsation,” and “precentage” also reduce clarity. Use precise terms such as “number,” “figure,” and “speak a language to their children,” and check spelling of the language names.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe both charts, but sentence structures are very limited and errors are frequent enough to make some relationships unclear. For example, “The below chart show the information the number” lacks a grammatical link between the chart and its subject, while “the Breton show the habitually language show” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Articles, plurals, and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “the number of speak” and “the Corsican about the percentage.” Most information is presented through fragments or loosely joined clauses rather than controlled sentences. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Occitan was spoken occasionally by about 1.065 million adults,” and use consistent past-tense reporting.

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