Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the number of adults in thousands whose parents spoke a regional language to their children in his childhood, and second digram shows the number of adults in thousands who speak a regional language to their own children.

Over all, Alsatian's are more who's parents spoke a regional language to them in early childhood, that is exact 600,000, while Occitan's also stand at same level in thousands. On the other hand, in Breton parents had less interest, and calculate about 250,000 in figure and Creole and Corsican are about at same position, that is nearly to 100,000.

On the other hand, if we count the number of adults who speak a regional language to their own children are including Alsatian's around 400,000, And Occitan adults are almost 200,000 who give regional language to their own family members.

Here Breton, Creole and Corsican fall between 0 to 100,000.

Overall, Alsatian, Occitan and Breton have huge difference but remaining are almost on same level.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify both charts and include an overview, but the report only partially covers the key comparisons. The first chart separates habitual from occasional speech, yet your figures generally combine or blur these categories: for example, Occitan is about 620,000 habitual and 1,065,000 occasional, not simply “at same level” as Alsatian. You also say Breton is about 250,000 without clarifying which series, and omit the important contrast that Occitan is highest for occasional use while Alsatian leads habitual use and speaking to children. The second chart is described only broadly. The response is also 145 words, below the required 150. Develop the overview and report accurate, clearly labelled comparisons for both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic structure: an introduction, a paragraph about the first chart, a paragraph about the second, and a concluding overview. This gives the reader some sense of the report’s direction. However, progression is weakened by repeated and sometimes confusing transitions, especially “On the other hand” at the start of the third paragraph, where you are moving to the second chart rather than presenting a contrast. The final “Overall” repeats a general comparison without adding a clear summary. Group the data by chart and then by meaningful similarities or differences, using transitions such as “By contrast” only when the figures genuinely contrast. Clearer links between each figure and its language would also improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “regional language,” “adults,” “childhood,” and “figure,” and attempt to describe comparisons with phrases such as “same level” and “fall between.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or awkward, which can make the data difficult to interpret. For instance, “parents had less interest” assigns a motive that the chart does not show, while “give regional language to their own family members” is not a natural way to describe speaking to children. “Alsatian’s” is also an incorrect form for referring to the language or group. Use precise chart language such as “the number of speakers,” “approximately,” and “spoke the language occasionally.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the main topic is usually understandable. However, control is inconsistent: errors in agreement, sentence construction, articles, and punctuation occur repeatedly. For example, “the number of adults … are including” has faulty agreement and an incomplete construction, while “Alsatian’s are more” does not form a clear grammatical comparison. The sentence beginning “Here Breton, Creole and Corsican fall…” also needs a clearer subject and more precise structure. Several sentences join ideas with commas or capitalise “And” mid-sentence, making the report harder to read. Practise accurate patterns such as “The number of adults who speak … is…” and use complete sentences with consistent punctuation.

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