Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Regional language is a basic assert of any language. First and second chart tells us about 5 different regional languages spoken by parents habitually and occasionally . Other one shows that who speak regional languages of France to their own children habitually or occasionally.

In first one Alsatian and Occitan both are on top. Almost 600 thousand parents spoke these regional languages habitaually to their children. Only Occitan is one most popular laguage in second chart with 1.2 million parents spoken occasionally. There are some other languages in both charts name as Breton, Creole .These are such languages which are less spoken by parents habitually and occasionally. One one langauge which parents almost did not prefer to speak is Corsican.

Second chart describe about same regional languages, but its tell us about who speak such languages to their own children. In front of us Alsatian is only laguage with 400 thousand adults speake occasionally or habitually with their own children. Occitan is on number 2 almost 250 thousand adults used it to apeak.

In conclusion Alsatian and Accitan are main languages used by parents and adults in all three charts spoke occasionally and habitually.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response identifies the two chart topics and mentions several relevant languages, but it does not accurately report the main comparisons. The first chart distinguishes adults whose parents spoke a language habitually or occasionally; the second shows adults speaking it to their own children. However, you describe the second chart as showing occasional or habitual speech, and say Alsatian and Occitan are both “on top” without distinguishing their figures. Occitan, at about 1,065 thousand, is clearly highest for occasional childhood exposure, while Alsatian is about 600 thousand for habitual exposure. The overview is also inaccurate: Alsatian and Occitan are not the main languages across all three series, and the response omits the substantial decline in numbers speaking these languages to their own children. Select and compare the clearest patterns more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, discussion of the first chart, a paragraph on the second, and a conclusion. This gives the report some organisation, and phrases such as “In conclusion” signal a transition. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the charts are repeatedly referred to as “first one,” “other one,” and “second chart,” without consistently explaining which measure is being discussed. The first-chart details and second-chart figures are also mixed with broad claims, and the conclusion repeats an unclear summary rather than synthesising the main pattern. Use clear topic sentences and organise comparisons by measure—for example, childhood exposure first, then transmission to children—and use linking phrases to show contrasts.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “regional languages,” and “adults,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “basic assert,” “on top,” “one most popular laguage,” and “used it to apeak.” Repetition of “speak,” “language,” and “chart” also makes the report less precise. Spelling errors, including “habitaually,” “Accitan,” and “langauge,” further reduce control. Aim for accurate chart-reporting expressions such as “the highest figure,” “spoke the language regularly,” and “the number fell to,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish exposure in childhood from speaking a language to one’s own children.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent and sentence structures are mostly simple or faulty. For example, “First and second chart tells us” has an article and subject–verb agreement problem, while “Other one shows that who speak…” is not a well-formed clause. In “its tell us,” the pronoun and verb do not agree, and “Alsatian is only laguage with 400 thousand adults speake…” contains several errors that obscure the intended relationship. The conclusion also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Practise accurate sentence patterns for describing figures, such as “The chart shows that…” and “Around 400,000 adults speak Alsatian to their children.” Check articles, agreement, verb forms, and punctuation when editing.

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