Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrates number of French adults whose speak French regional lanaguage to them when they were kids and also the number who spoke a French regional language to their own children.

Therefore,the Alastain Language was 600 Spoken habitually and only 200 Spoken occasionally which means most of the people speak Alastain regularly. The Occitan Language was also 600 Spoken habitually and 1 million people Spoken occasionally.Most of the people speak in Occitan once in while. On the hand Breton and Creole Language was 200 Spoken habitually and 400 Spoken occasionally while Corsican was not Spoken habitually and occasionally.

Furthermore,Number of adults who speak a regional Language to their own children also have same percentage .300 people speak Alsatian with their own children which is good because they can learn there mother Language by it easily . 250 people speak Occitan and 100 people breton which is less than Alsatian but they are trying which is good point.while Crole and Corsican do not speak at all.

In conclusion, Most of the avoid to speak their own Language with their children becasue they thing at it would not help them in their future.Alsation was spoken little bit that's good thing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response identifies both charts and makes some relevant comparisons, including that Alsatian is prominent among adults speaking to their children and that Occitan has a high occasional-use figure. However, several key values are inaccurate: Occitan is about 620 thousand habitual and 1,065 thousand occasional, not 600 thousand and 1 million; Alsatian occasional use is about 240 thousand, not 200 thousand. Corsican is not zero in either childhood category, and adults do speak Creole and Corsican to their children, though in smaller numbers. The conclusion also invents a reason—people avoid passing on the language because it will not help their children’s future—which the charts cannot establish. A clearer overview of the main patterns and accurate comparisons are needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the report into an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and sequencing words such as “Therefore” and “Furthermore” signal movement between points. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the first body paragraph lists languages without a clear comparison, while the second mixes figures with personal comments about learning a mother tongue. Some links are inaccurate or awkward, such as “On the hand,” and “also have same percentage” does not clearly connect to the figures that follow. The conclusion introduces an unsupported explanation rather than summarising the chart’s main trends. Grouping the largest and smallest figures and using precise references would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “regional language” and “own children,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent imprecise or incorrect forms that strain clarity: “Alastain” and “Alsation” are misspellings of Alsatian, while “Crole” is an inaccurate form of Creole. Phrases such as “once in while,” “speak in Occitan” and “spoken little bit” are not natural or precise for describing chart data. Personal evaluations such as “which is good” also take the report away from an objective academic style. Use accurate language names and a wider set of neutral comparison terms, such as “approximately,” “whereas” and “the highest figure.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing relies mainly on short, simple statements, with limited control of more complex sentence patterns. Errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “The chart illustrates number of French adults whose speak” has problems with the article and relative clause, and “Breton and Creole Language was” has subject–verb agreement and number errors. The sentence beginning “300 people speak Alsatian” is also poorly connected to the preceding clause, and punctuation is inconsistent, including missing spaces after commas and full stops. There are attempts to link clauses with “which” and “because,” but these structures are not reliably controlled. Practise accurate sentence frames for comparisons and check articles, agreement, and punctuation.

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