Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar charts illustrate the consumption of parants whose speak franch language with their child during childhood period and the parents who speak french regional language to theis children

Overall, it is evidant that. paeants whoes speak native language alsatian with their child is high than the other language, while carsican is the lowest among the whole. Other language that's parents spoke to them in childhood. Spoken habitually language is almost similiar both in aisatian and occitan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response makes a limited attempt to describe the charts, identifying Alsatian as relatively high and Corsican as low, but it does not accurately establish the main comparisons. In the childhood chart, Occitan—not Alsatian—has the highest combined figures, especially for occasional speech, while Corsican is indeed lowest. The statement that habitual speech is similar for Alsatian and Occitan is broadly supported, but the report does not clearly compare either childhood category with the figures for adults speaking to their own children. It also lacks a developed account of the key data. The response is 77 words, below the required 150, which further limits coverage. Include a clear overview and select accurate figures to support the main trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence introduces the charts, followed by an overview beginning with “Overall”. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the ideas are not developed into a clear sequence, and the second paragraph combines several comparisons without explaining how they relate. The phrase “Other language that's parents spoke to them in childhood” is incomplete and interrupts the progression. There are no detailed body paragraphs to separate the childhood data from the figures for speaking to children, and linking is very limited. Use a short introduction, a concise overview, and separate paragraphs for the two chart topics, with clear comparison language.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bar charts”, “regional language”, “habitually” and “childhood”, so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is narrow and several word choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to follow: “consumption” is not suitable for language use, while “parants”, “franch” and “aisatian” are inaccurate. Phrases such as “high than the other language” and “the lowest among the whole” are also unnatural. These limitations fit a response with basic vocabulary and noticeable errors, rather than precise control. Learn common chart-reporting collocations such as “the number of adults who spoke…” and “the highest figure”, and check spelling of language names.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few sentence forms, including an overview introduced by “Overall” and a comparison using “while”. However, control of sentence structure is weak: “The bar charts illustrate the consumption of parants whose speak…” does not form a clear grammatical clause, and “Other language that's parents spoke to them in childhood” is a fragment. There are also problems with agreement and sentence construction in “Alsatian … is high than the other language” and “language is almost similiar both in…”. The full stop after “evidant that” also breaks the sentence incorrectly. These errors repeatedly obscure meaning, while the limited range offers little evidence of accurate complex structures. Practise complete subject–verb clauses and simple comparative sentences before adding complexity.

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