Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Overall, it can be seen that number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke are the Alsatian and Occitan adults to them in childhood is the highest figures in the first shematic, folowed by breton language in the second place, and finaly creole and corsican adult have a lowest figures. Then the number of adults (in thousands) who speak a regional language to their own children Alsatian an Occitan are the major people speaking to their children, and breton, creole, corsican are the smalest groupe.

the first bar chart presented 600 people of alsatian and occitan spoken habitually, where this number decreased at around 290 occasionally to alsatian adults, while reached a peak of 1 million for occiton adults occaionally, breton rosed from 300 habitually to 400 occasionally, the creole and corsican remained stable 100 adults is all cas.

The second shematic, showed the number of adults who speak a regional language to their own children, the Alsatian people have the major figure with 400 thousands, folowed by Occitan people 250 thousand, in the theerd place Creole Breton and Creole people with around 100 thousand, and the latest one is the Corsican people

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main categories and make a useful attempt to compare the two charts, including the high figures for Alsatian and Occitan and the lower figures for Creole and Corsican. However, the overview is difficult to interpret and does not clearly summarise the key contrast: Occitan is highest for occasional childhood exposure, while Alsatian is highest for speaking to children. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: Breton is about 260 thousand habitually, not 300; Alsatian is about 240 thousand occasionally, not 290; and the second chart places Breton at about 90 thousand and Creole at 80 thousand, rather than grouping them around 100. The report therefore covers the task only partially, with important comparisons obscured. State the overview clearly, then select and report the most significant figures accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: you begin with an overview and then discuss the first and second charts separately. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression within paragraphs is weak, and several long sentences combine multiple comparisons without clear links. For example, the overview sentence beginning “Overall, it can be seen” is difficult to follow, while “the creole and corsican remained stable 100 adults is all cas” does not make the intended comparison clear. The final paragraph also ends abruptly. Use one concise overview followed by clearly ordered detail paragraphs, and connect comparisons with accurate, varied linkers such as “whereas,” “by contrast,” and “respectively.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “number,” “figure,” “decreased,” “peak,” and “remained stable,” and you attempt to distinguish habitual from occasional speech. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the report hard to understand, such as “major people speaking,” “the latest one,” and “in the second place.” Spelling errors are also noticeable, including “folowed,” “shematic,” “occiton,” and “smalest.” These errors sometimes obscure meaning, particularly in the overview and the description of the second chart. Build a more precise set of terms for describing quantities and rankings, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but the range is limited and complex sentences are often faulty. Errors in sentence structure and agreement appear in phrases such as “number of adults … are the Alsatian and Occitan adults” and “the Alsatian people have the major figure.” Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “a lowest figures,” while the sentence beginning “the first bar chart presented” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, and the final sentence is incomplete. These problems can make comparisons difficult to follow. Practise writing short, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then combine them using accurate clauses and punctuation.

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