Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The following graph illustrates the trends of the french people who speaks french regional language habitually and ocasionally as france is a great country where every region has its own style of speaking as corsican is the least spoken language which is not preffered by people to speak habitually or ocasionally like there are very less peoples who speak around fifty thousand people and though is it very less spoken but has its own sighnificance then creole is the same but slightly higher as eighty to ninety thousand people speaks both ocasionally and habitually then breton around hundered thousand people use to speak thier mother tongue with thier own children and in different parts its spoken but as it comes on occitan and alsatian its the most highest spoken language which people use to speak with thier own childeren which is spoken habitually in ever part and every where and around more than five hundered thousand people speaks

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response makes a limited attempt to describe the charts, mentioning several languages and some approximate figures, but it does not clearly report the information requested. It focuses mainly on general comments about regional identity and speaking habits, such as “France is a great country” and Corsican having its own “significance,” rather than comparing the two measures. Some claims are inaccurate: Corsican is not spoken by only around 50,000 people habitually or occasionally; the chart shows about 85,000 habitually and 105,000 occasionally. The statement that Alsatian and Occitan are the most spoken to children is also misleading: Alsatian leads at about 400,000, while Occitan is around 250,000. A clear overview and accurate comparisons of the main patterns are needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response contains a rough sequence from Corsican to Creole, Breton, and then Occitan and Alsatian, so the reader can identify some of the languages being discussed. However, the ideas are packed into one long sentence with no paragraphing or clear separation between overview and details. Repeated links such as “then,” “and,” and “as” do not show the relationships between the figures reliably, and the shift from adults’ childhood exposure to speaking to their own children is difficult to follow. For example, the sentence moves from Corsican figures to Creole and then to claims about children without clearly distinguishing the chart series. Use an overview followed by organised comparisons, with clear transitions and sentence boundaries.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “regional language,” and “spoken,” which helps identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or repetitive, such as “very less spoken,” “the most highest spoken,” and “use to speak.” Spelling errors—including “ocasionally,” “preffered,” “sighnificance,” and “hund ered”—also reduce accuracy and can make the report harder to read. Some wording is conversational or evaluative rather than suitable for a chart report, such as “France is a great country.” Aim for precise terms for quantities and comparisons, and use neutral reporting language rather than personal commentary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, but sentence control is weak: the response is essentially one extended sentence, with frequent problems in agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries. For instance, “people who speaks” should use a plural verb, while “eighty to ninety thousand people speaks” also needs plural agreement. The phrase “people use to speak” does not express the intended present habit correctly, and “as it comes on occitan and alsatian its the most highest” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Missing punctuation makes these errors more difficult to interpret. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using accurate subject–verb agreement and appropriate verb forms.

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