Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

this paragraph shows number of adults for a regional language.this paragraph is going on with thousands numbers.this paragraph shows three portions one for spoken habitually second is for spoken Occidental third is for those adults who speak a regional English to their own English.if we go to first portion we see there 5 languages:

Corsican, creole, Breton,occitan and Alsatian.

Corsican is spoken at very low rate.occitan and Alsatian is spoken at higher rate also they are at the same point which is higher one.

if we move to second portion there are also same language mentioned.

in this portion occitan is spoken at a very high rate as compared to other languages.there Corsican is also spoken at very low rate.it was also spoken at very low rate in first portion.now if we talk about last portion: this graph show ranges from zero to 600.

400 is using for the last touch.here Alsatian is spoken at higher rate as compared to other languages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the chart’s three parts and names the five languages, and it correctly notes that Occitan is especially high in the occasional-speaking group and Alsatian leads among adults speaking to their children. However, the report only minimally describes the data: it gives no figures and omits key comparisons, such as Occitan’s occasional figure being far above the others, and the substantial difference between the two childhood-speaking categories for Occitan. Some claims are inaccurate or unclear: Alsatian and Occitan are not at the same level in the habitual group, and “Occidental” and “regional English” misidentify the information. There is also no clear overall summary of the main patterns. Select the most important contrasts and support them with accurate approximate values.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic sequence through the chart’s three sections, signalled by phrases such as “if we go to first portion,” “if we move to second portion,” and “now if we talk about last portion.” This gives the reader some sense of order. However, the response is presented as one continuous paragraph, and the repeated “this paragraph” and “portion” phrasing makes the progression mechanical rather than clearly organised as a report. Connections between observations are also weak, and references such as “they” and “it” are not always clear. Use a brief introduction and overview, then group the main comparisons into separate paragraphs, with linking language that shows contrasts and rankings.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary is sufficient to identify broad chart features, including “higher rate,” “very low rate,” and “compared to other languages.” However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “spoken” and “rate” used repeatedly instead of more precise language for quantities and comparisons. Several choices are inaccurate or unsuitable for this task: “spoken Occidental” appears to confuse Occitan with a category, while “regional English” does not describe the chart. “400 is using for the last touch” is also difficult to interpret. Use terms such as “number,” “figure,” “approximately,” “highest,” and “lowest,” and name the categories exactly as shown. This would make the report clearer and more appropriately academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response uses some simple clauses and attempts longer sentences with connectors such as “if we move to” and “as compared to,” but sentence structures remain limited and errors occur throughout. Examples include “this paragraph shows number” (missing an article), “Occitan and Alsatian is” (subject–verb disagreement), and “this graph show” (incorrect verb form). Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent: several sentences run together without spaces after full stops, and the opening sentence begins with a lowercase letter. These issues sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete sentence punctuation, then combine simple statements into controlled comparison sentences.

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