Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The chart illustrates the number of french young people, their parents talked to them in the community language in their childhood and count of adults who talk to their own children in regional french language.

Overall, occitan is considered highly spoken language ocassionally. While, in habitually it is spoken with aisatian. On the other hand corsican is the least favourable among parents. In addition to that aisatian is the languge used for children.

If see occitan it is used by more than 1 million parents ocassionay. Alstatian and occitan are almost qually used by habit nearly by 600 thousands. However, Breton, creole and corsican are not much famous as regional language, as they are higher than 100k.

Most of the Young people almost 400k they prefer to speak alsatian with their children and occitan is the second highest with number higher than 200k of adults. While, other three languages are nearly equally been spoken with chidren by near to 100k people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main categories and make a useful attempt to summarise the contrasts: Occitan is highest for occasional use, while Alsatian leads in the figures for speaking to children. However, the overview is not consistently accurate or clear. The chart shows Occitan as the highest for occasional childhood use, but Alsatian—not Occitan—is slightly highest for habitual use (about 600,000 versus 620,000 is close, with Occitan marginally higher in the supplied data). Your statement that Alsatian is “the language used for children” also overstates its position: it leads, but all five languages are represented. Some comparisons are vague, such as saying three languages are “higher than 100k.” Select the key rankings and report them precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and two paragraphs of details, and it uses basic linking expressions such as “Overall,” “On the other hand” and “In addition to that.” However, progression is uneven: the overview repeats or blurs comparisons, and the final paragraph shifts from childhood use to language spoken to children without a clear transition. Some connectors are awkward or do not express the intended relationship, as in “While, in habitually” and “However” before the list of less-used languages. Group the figures consistently by chart or by highest and lowest values, and use clear references to distinguish the two measures. This would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “regional language” and “highest,” so the reader can generally identify the topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “highly spoken language ocassionally” is not a natural way to describe the largest occasional-use figure, and “least favourable among parents” does not accurately describe the lowest category. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “french,” “aisatian,” “ocassionay,” “languge” and “chidren.” Use precise reporting terms such as “the largest number,” “the smallest figure” and “spoke the language to their children,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons introduced by “While” and “However,” but control is inconsistent. Several sentence patterns are incomplete or faulty: “If see occitan” lacks a correctly formed conditional structure, and “While, in habitually it is spoken with aisatian” is not a complete, well-formed sentence. Agreement and verb forms are also problematic in “other three languages are nearly equally been spoken,” while “their parents talked to them” does not clearly express the chart’s habitual childhood measure. Punctuation around sentence openings is sometimes misplaced, particularly the comma after “While.” Build clearer sentences with a subject and finite verb, and use consistent past-tense reporting, for example, “Occitan was spoken occasionally by just over one million adults.”

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