Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

According to the given chart we conclude that there are 600 thousand adults whose parents spoke Alsatian and Occitan language habitually and about 220 thousand adults,1.5m thousand adults are those whom parents spoken Alsatian and Occitan language to them ocassionally.There are about 280 thousand adults whose parents spoke Breton language habitually to them and 400 thousand adults parents spoke it ocassionally.now talking about Creole language so there are also 100 thousand adults whose parents spoke it habitually and ocassionally also.as we talk about Corsican language there are about 90 thousand adults whose parents spoke this language habitually to their children,and there are 100 thousand adults whose parents spoke this language ocassionally to them.Talking about the second graph we come to know that there are 400 thousand adults who speak Alsatian language,about 250 thousand who speak Occitan,99 thousand adults who speak Breton,about 96 thousand who speak Creole,and finally there are about 55 thousand adults who speak Corsican language to their own children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response includes figures from both charts and identifies several relevant categories, but it does not provide a clear overview of the main patterns. Some key data are also substantially misreported: for example, Occitan spoken occasionally is about 1,065 thousand, not “1.5m,” while Alsatian spoken occasionally is about 240 thousand, not “220 thousand.” The statement that Creole was spoken habitually and occasionally by the same number is inaccurate; the figures are about 105 and 120 thousand. The second chart is covered more accurately, though some values differ. To improve, summarise the largest and smallest figures and the contrast between childhood exposure and speaking to one’s own children, then select accurate comparisons to support that overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows the chart categories in a broadly understandable order, moving from the first chart to the second, and phrases such as “Talking about the second graph” signal a change in focus. However, the information is presented as one long sequence rather than being grouped into clear paragraphs or organised around an overview and supporting details. Repeated transitions such as “as we talk about” and “now talking about” make the progression mechanical, while the opening claim does not clearly distinguish the two languages or measures. Use a short overview first, then separate paragraphs for the childhood figures and the figures for adults speaking to their children. Group related comparisons rather than listing each category in turn.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is sufficient to identify the chart’s subject and categories, using terms such as “habitually,” “occasionally,” and “to their own children.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, including “there are … adults” and “talking about.” Spelling errors such as “ocassionally” are noticeable, and “1.5m thousand” is an unclear way to express a figure. These choices can make the data harder to interpret, even though the general topic remains recognisable. Aim for concise reporting language and accurate number expressions, such as “approximately 1.1 million” or “around 240,000,” and vary verbs with options such as “recorded” or “spoke.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to connect several pieces of information in longer sentences, but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors are frequent enough to make some relationships unclear. For example, “adults,1.5m thousand adults are those whom parents spoken” lacks clear sentence boundaries and has an incomplete verb construction; “parents spoke it occasionally” also needs a clearer subject relationship. Capitalisation after full stops is inconsistent, as in “ocassionally.now,” and commas are often used where a full stop or conjunction is needed. Build shorter, complete sentences first, checking that each has a subject and a correctly formed verb. Then add controlled comparisons using structures such as “whereas” or “compared with.”

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